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~Aftermath~

Storms of fury,
envelope broken hearts.
Desperation driving desires;
hostel intentions, undeserving.
Particles of disassembled emotions
coagulate amongst treads of shoes.
Traveling paths of melancholy,
as the wind's sighs echo.

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  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 15, 2008
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    A most beautiful composition well written & Versed!
    Well Done!


  • Nevel
    July 15, 2008

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    wonderful imagery, your poems seems more concentrated..I like your use of the wind as metapfor..A short and powerfully piece


  • luna-midnight gold member
    July 15, 2008

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    awww wow i really like this and the ending is superb
    keep it up, and have fun
    stephanie♥