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shadow in the litter

laying flat in the grass

staring up at those
billion stars in the night sky



i can't blink.


i've forgotten my glasses
and now the stars are
one big blur of pinpricks.




i'm next to the highway
listening to cars
speed by, not seeing me



i'm wearing your soccer jersey
it's as green as the last
moment you wore it
and now i blend in
with the grass.


i'm camouflaged.


and this charm bracelet
you gave me
glimmers in the moonlight
just like the new toaster
my mother bought last spring.



when i think of you
i feel as though
i'm rolling in sugar
because i miss your sweetness so.


and i'm always on patrol
watching to see if
maybe you're on tour of this little town
like an eagle coming home
on spread wings

and that you'd come see me again.








but the glare
that the moonlight makes
off of the slick wet roads


only reminds me that


you're nothing but a shadow
hiding in the litter
on the highway where you first loved me.

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  • Amythest Moonjade
    July 30, 2008

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    Merry meet,

    Congratulations on winning the Silver. This was a very clever use of the word bank. I could imagine being there looking up at the sky. Very nice work.

    Congratulations again on your win.


    Amythest


  • shutter-bug
    July 23, 2008

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    this was so bittersweet. i liked the ending. it was very powerful, and very vivid. i thought some of the analogies were creative and very amusing. for instance, the charm bracelet/toaster analogy. it made me laugh at the beginning, but as i thought about it, it made alot of sense and was a very effective piece of imagery. it was just so off beat and different. but i liked it. fantastic poem!


  • crazymomma
    July 21, 2008

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    The imagery is very vivid in this and the emotion powerful and sad. I like how you describe the hurt without being "whoa is me"


  • Florida Sunshine
    July 18, 2008

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    Wow -- I loved this.... In my opinion 'this' is how a free verse write should read. -- People take note...

    The imagery, is off the chart!

    Excellent job... your words did impact me.

    Thanks for entering the contest - I do appreciate having the opportunity to read your work.

    Best of luck to you,
    Florida Sunshine