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Berlin: summer, 1980

 

 

 

 

The urban German sprawl quickly cooled,

as it gladly threw off the heat of the day

like a toddler, shedding clothing

wanting to run free and naked.

 

A throwaway plastic cup tumbled across the station

platform and onto the tracks, caught by a stiff

breeze from the train that sped past. The next one

was mine, several minutes away yet.

 

A young couple is necking on a bench,

the overhead fluorescent light is flickering,

the strobe effect catches them with an odd illumination,

their passionate advances seem almost robotic.

 

The smell of half eaten schnitzels and

stale beer, wafts from a garbage can beside me

as I turn again, the necking couple is gone,

stumbling up the steps, laughing

 

still engaged in amorous pleasantries and

I was thinking of the underground clubs

further down town and how I was to be

entertained by

 

the counter-culture with their raucous Iggy Pop

Clash gyrations and of course, the beer, I liked

the German beer, always fresh, tasty but

very filling and speaking of filling…

 

my bladder is about to burst so, I duck down

the stairs, leading off the platform to relieve myself,

in the dark, as my train arrives and I miss it…

because of a much needed piss, “Shit!”

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: "Sometimes you just have to
pee in the sink..."

~Charles Bukowski~


The content of this piece was taken from the deep dusty archives of my memory, kind of 'prosey' but I hope you enjoy it nonetheless.

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  • Dalaney gold member
    July 28
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  • hmmm...interesting snapshot in time...I think the word is "quirky", actually...and I keep reading over again to see if there is any little detail I missed, because there is A LOT of detail here... good luck in the contest!!!
  • LOL. How amusing. You centered an entire, brilliant poem, off of that one quote??? You are too much!!!

    Thanks for the enjoyable read.


  • adsaige gold member
    July 15

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    well written, i must say. and yes,
    this is particularly funny, i must
    enter this contest, as i've done
    some stupid stuff!

    ah, love the title.

  • malmadre gold member
    July 15

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    The scene is rich with the realness of life, those train and bus schedules will always be on time when we need just a few minutes for relieving ourselves. I am reminded of a young cousin in potty training as she repeated the need to go "pee! pee! pee!" and when she let go, she said "aw shit!" as I smile in remembering and smile at your angst.

  • Dammit!! Missing the train!

    You always have such fascinating stories to tell my friend! This is no different... I enjoyed it immensely!

    Prose perhaps.. but always poetic!

  • I am sure you were smiling as you wrote this entertaining piece taken from the archives of your memory because I had a chuckle reading it. Especially the last lines. Well done. Juls


  • Amera gold member
    July 15

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    What a wonderful take on the prompt! You set a scene, bring the reader in by painting a mood with smells, color and motion then you let us feel the irritable urge at the end making the whole thing human. Wonderful!

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • I love reading your travelogues and reminiscences. They are always just a little 'quirky'

    Best of luck in the contest dear.

    Love Margaret

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