Gazing up at twilight skies
I take a breath and close my eyes
The darkness is an inky black
To mortal days I can't go back
A meaningless existence here
Is shattered when the light appears
Across my starry, twilight sky
A meteor lights up my life
Her brilliant beauty captures me
My twilight stars I cannot see
Radiance within her smile
Suddenly life seems worthwhile
And though I tried to leave you be
The sun you had become to me
The fire I revolved around
Without your light I nearly drowned
The moon and stars were dark as night
Dulled because she is so bright
She is the reason that I'm here
My light, my love, my Bella, my dear
Author notes
"The stars are so glad they've found you." -- "Lila" by Bright Eyes.
Written from Edward's point of view for Bella
(option 7)
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300 points, ended August 1, 2008, 5 entries
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So... what do you think?
Comments
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love it!
If I ever write a romance novel, could I include you in it?? -
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*Smiles*
Certainly, if ever you do, I would be honoured.
Many blessings
~Becca
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Nice
It express Edward's feelings in many ways. I love the way you made Bella, his love, his sun, his stars. I love it. Great job. Good luck -
excellent~
I have read all of her books in this series but one..
Library can't keep them long enough.sighs....
This was excellent and congrats on the winning trophy
I got Honorable Mention...nice to meet you and hope you come give my poem a read as well
Susan~~~
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Wonderful Write I loved it. I remember thinking this as I read the two books I have read I love in much the same way with someone but this brought it to home. Thank you for entering .
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This was beautiful. I absolutely loved it. Excellent job. Wonderfully done. I loved it. Keep on writing. God Bless!
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very good poem, well written and well structured, well done on this write and i wish you the best of luck in my contest.
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Sweet and simple yet so beautiful. Great use of light and dark to contrast his life before and after Bella. Lovely write!
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Beautiful. The feelings were strong to display the difference between life in dark and light. Great work.
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wonderful
I loved the whole thing,dear. Wonderful so sweet and fragile.I like the book alot and This is a wonderful adaptaion to the book.
i saved it btw
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awww this is so like edward to feel like that. and i luv how you made it rhyme. it seems so delicate and sweet, i luved it
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oh, but you will need to add your username!!!
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OME!!! I TOTALLY LOVE THIS!!! ecpecially the last line! I want Edward!
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Amazing and very clever
well done beauty dips from every line i loved the opening. the flow was awesome and it was very easy to follow loved it please keep up the good and keep sharing
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this is sooooooooooooo good!..i dont have a favorite part of this beacuse, well, the whole poem is my favorite part!
keep writing
keep smiling
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Wow, this is really good! I love reading the twilight series and I thought that you canptured Edward's point of view perfectly. Wonderful write!
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lovely use of rhyming =) i also love the last stanza
"The moon and stars were dark as night
Dulled because she is so bright
She is the reason that I'm here
My light, my love, my Bella, my dear"
It's beautful!
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Beautiful write. I like how you have incorporated the quote through out this poem. Very creative. Thank you for your entry, best of luck in the contest.♥
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I've heard of this series of books..at least I think they're books haha.
Lovely poem. The stars and space related imagery is always a nice touch and it's colossal and gentle all in the same breath. Well done and good luck in the contest
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