Powers in hand
are playing,
plaguing body with anxiety
and
placing obstacles in occurrence
Virginal white encountering
barred entrances
and
the barren awareness;
today would not be the day…
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http://littlemewhatever.deviantart.com/art/This-Innocence-83764857
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A contest entry
- Individualized Picture Prompts #2 by notorious.
722 points, ended July 19, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Forgot to add that I loved the title.
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Credit the artist in your AN, Cin?
Anyways...I love "Powers in hand"...makes me think of a really arbitrary god or something.
"plaguing body with anxiety"
I can totally get that from the pic.
"Virginal white"
LoL...white is always portrayed as innocence, and rightly so.
"barred entrances and the barren awareness"
Awesome!!! Although...I don't really fancy 'and' having a line break of its own. The word just doesn't seem groovy enough to own its own line, considering it's only 3 letters...
LoL...why not:
"barred entrances,
barren awareness
[Cin expands on that w/o giving 'and' a separate line]
(: Just an idea...
"today would not be her day..."
Very suspenseful (and kind of melancholy). Although..MAYBE (just maybe!) make 'her' --> 'the'...
"the day..." would imply a special occasion maybe...more intriguing?
Just my random thoughts. Very cool write and thanks for entering!!
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Cant believe i forgot will edit it in, as soon as im done here lol
The and..well there's two of them, on there own like that for a reason..I am keeping the flow of the piece
it works to me..im sorry it doesnt for you so much..but im not changing it
but i agree the day does make it more intriguing, thank you
Love your random thoughts darl..mostly cause not enough do it on here etc
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That's cool--poet's integrity
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hehe
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Yes yes sis! I think you captured the feeling of that picture perfectly!
And I think brevity is best here and you've done it so well!
Love it.. good luck!
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thanks SiS
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cinful ooohhh..you naughty
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hehe yep
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ahhh im in this one too.lol
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yay
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hahaha, the dancing whores
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yep
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well look at em
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can't wait for something awesome!
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Aww thanks Cuz..and I hear you wrote a poem, I should go read heheh
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Cinful huh? =P
http://gunselsenol.deviantart.com/art/Just-Pretending-Vol-VI-91707081
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i've always been cinful
sinful with my twist hehehe :
thanks will go look now darl
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Twisted sins...let me know
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oh sounds good...new name for me heheh twistedly sinful
pity i love the current one SO much heheh
Now the pic--- can I please have another
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Herstory repeats itself!!
http://sjupiter-belcha.deviantart.com/art/Lemon-and-cola-5-91732699
=D This one is a little ridiculous -
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oh bleep i cant do anything with that
wots wrong with me...wake up Cindy
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LMAO that picture was a joke..
http://rosiael.deviantart.com/art/Gundam-00-Setsuna-F-Seiei-81533224
Tell me if this one has problems (this one is a little more serious than iced tea) -
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hehehehe
cheeky...
i need something with more then jus a chick in it
i dont know why but it leaves me blank
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Well, you managed to write something on that last pic...Gosh, let me try again.
http://littlemewhatever.deviantart.com/art/This-Innocence-83764857
The title of this picture is one I find quite interesting.. And the b/g might distract you from "the chick"
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I LOV THE PIC
but got a prob...it doesnt want to let me save it to computer so i can post it wuth poem etc
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actully scrap that lol
i found a way round it
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hehe thats true
no more excuses
I WILL MAKE THIS PIC WORK
Thanks darl
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AHAHAHAHA I know you will
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