I saw it once,
that smile you wore
after summer's kiss
I discovered it
while I was lost
somewhere in
emotive binary
where only your lips
could decipher
my path to home
I felt as though
I could step
between worlds
and you would follow
Even if
I begged you stay
you would slay
the agency of
protective illusion
and I could not be mad
Before you
I was robotic
a machine of flesh
living on the edge
of nothingness
You were the pulse
that rebooted senses
showing me that there
was something more
between red and blue,
we could make
our own choices
So here I am
lifted up by you,
impervious to bullets
and I will never leave
If ever I need
the strength to continue
I will search your eyes
for the whisper
of an oracle
and know...
You are The One
Author notes
my thoughts on the pic:
Never Letting Go by ~jkthedragon
If you haven't seen The Matrix you wont get some of this
In a list
A contest entry
- Individualized Picture Prompts #2 by notorious.
722 points, ended July 19, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 33 of 33
-
Bookmarking has commenced.
-
This is awesome and such a sweet
write. I loved every word in this
poem. Well done and congratulations
to you on your Gold! A well deserved
piece. Thanks a lot for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
yeah im one of those who hasnt really watched aall the matrix...but I understand enough of this..loved the imagery....and the point to it..you are the one
you did awesome on the picture and with the movie too Bro, congrats on the gold
Cind's
-
-
You...HAVEN'T WATCHED ALL THE MATRIX MOVIES?!!!!!!
Dan, let's get our slapping hands ready
-
-
I like the smile, discovered while lost, deciphering your path home. Nice - stanza 3, a machine... living on the edge of nothingness, you were the pulse... showing there was something more, here I am lifted up by you and I will search your eyes... and know that you are The One.
Congratulations on the GOLD.
Marlene
-
RED OR BLUE? Congrats
-
Wicked! You really took this pic and the Matrix references to a whole new level! Good luck bro.. tho you won't need it
-
Heheheh. This made me laugh a bit. The references were good and the imagery effective, I just found the phrases 'before you I was robotic' to be almost comical. I could picture a stiff Neo trying to move around. This was very good!
-
-
Neo is my hero, robot or not.
-
-
I always like Smith...
-
-
What? But Neo's cooler. Although Smith has to be my favorite villain/program...no wait, The Oracle's my favorite program.
-
-
-
-
Can I be the AC to your DC
-
-
How cleverly un-cheesy
-
-
OMG!!!
This is just incredible! The passion of thought - intensity, coursing in brilliant waves... So very moving. The imagery is spot on and so poignant.
"I saw it once,
that smile you wore
after summer's kiss"...
"where only your lips
could decipher
my path to home"
.. that in itself just gave me tingles ..
and this:
"If ever I need
the strength to continue
I will search your eyes
for the whisper
of an oracle
and know...
You are The One"
Wow... The poem as a whole is amazing, but these lines just breached my being as a dear friend of mine would say lol. Excellent piece! Best wishes in the contest!
-
May I add, your AN cracks me up.
-
Geeky and eloquent=good
LMFAO!!!!!!!!!! I love this... A couple of buttholes pulled out of my contest, but this made me pleased again.
"after summer's kiss"
Very poetic.
"somewhere in emotive binary where only your lips could decipher my path to home"
AMAZING dude!! LoL...and it doesn't give me a cheese vibe. "emotive binary" has me going all happy & stuff.
"I felt as though
I could step
between worlds
and you would follow"
Sounds like Neo to me!!
"I begged you stay
you would slay
the agency of
protective illusion"
Begging Trinity to stay...LoL, I can see the movie here , and that's awesome... "agency of protective illusion" Haha!! I love that.
"You were the pulse
that rebooted senses
showing me that there
was something more
between red and blue,"
Heh, LOVE your reference to thy pills. "Rebooted senses" is another nice one, and I like your usage of 'pulse'.
"impervious to bullets"
HAHA!!! =D I think you'll understand why I love this line.
"for the whisper of an oracle and know..."
Amazing and great reference.
"You are the one"
HAHAHA!! =P Although..capitalization of 'The One' could be utilized to make it all...significant-schmancy.
Thanks for feeding my geek appetite with this...I bet if I'd given this pic to anybody else, they'd have turned it down
-
-
hehe glad you liked it! Wrote it to make you smile.
-
-
AWWW LMAO you totally made my day
-
-
And capitalized that at the end there too lol
-
-
Cool BTW, your thoughts for the hilarious title?
-
-
The title of this?
-
-
Yeah. Makes me grin.
-
-
Oh that would be my Matrix reference to finding peace in somebody, aka Cannon for me
-
-
LoL gotcha...that may be my most favorite-est love analogy
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
-
As a head's up, I'd commend you for turning it non-cheesy. But if you make it cheesy, I know you can also do that well, even if you make me puke (: So...win, win.
-
-
hehe no puking on Dan's page lol you leave that for my ones
-
-
Jessica has free will I don't take orders from no one!!! Muahahahahahaha... Feeling a little odd today, excuse me.
-
-
-
Loving the pic!!! YEHAW... Matrix Madness
Good luck bro! -
-
-
http://jkthedragon.deviantart.com/art/Never-Letting-Go-84293369
Just because I know you can do something geeky and eloquent with it...forgive me in advance.
-
-
hahahahaha!! How did I know.
-
-
Am I forgiven yet?
-
-
At least you know you won't get Hancock!!! LOL
-
-
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 33 of 33
