I love Autumn
with her black cloak
wrapped around my shoulders
because things are dying
all around me
in tiny pieces of yesterday
eyes closed
and fingers clamped among
midnight fur
touching darkness
that breeds within me
I hold the reason
to count your own years
buried beneath weather-beaten flesh...
Author notes
picture prompt ~ TheDeathclock by hellwoman at Deviantart
A contest entry
- Individualized Picture Prompts #2 by notorious.
722 points, ended July 19, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very beautiful, dark, and edgy. It has a slightly gypsy feel to it. Maybe that's the pic, but your poem fits it quite well.
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Oooh, I like this, dark and edgy but snuggled into. Nice - "because things are dying/all around me/in tiny pieces of yesterday," "fingers clamped among midnight fur/touching darkness that breeds within me," and "buried beneath weather-beaten flesh. Has a linger effect.
Congratulations on the silver.
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Congrats...when you get back!! (:
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Truely a beautiful write! Undertones of dark that are offset by the feel of comfort felt..
Adore this write! It's going into my bookmarks!
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Aw, thanks for writing me something so special...
"wrapped around my shoulders"
Love this...has an intimate (in a non-romantic way) feel.
"because things are dying all around me in tiny pieces of yesterday"
How profoundly stated!!! "tiny pieces of yesterday" is really nice.
"midnight fur"
Great allusion to the cat (totally adorable by the way--love your title!!)
"I hold the reason to count your own years"
Intriguing...
"weather-beaten flesh..."
Nicely said.
Thanks so much for entering (: -
Ohhhhh love that picture!!
Can't wait to read.. good luck!
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Isn't the cat so cute?!
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Ahaha love your res. title (:
http://hellwoman.deviantart.com/art/TheDeathClock-03-79325657
Good luck
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