A place where birds and butterflies abound
in trees of shades of greens,
where Pegasi fly and unicorns roam.
The sky, a brilliant azure blue with soft clouds,
Satyrs, Nymphs, and Gnomes play by the edge of a chuckling brook as fish jump in the air.
Deep in my imagination,
where all things are possible,
where fun and laughter reign,
where around each bend
is a discovery waiting to be found.
Where the God and Goddess rule benign,
here is my santuary against the world.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie-Prompt-10 x 10 lines-An hour to write....on..... by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended July 15, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the mention of the god and goddess. its a simple idea of a sanctuary of the mind but you made it a very descriptive write. I like these kinds of poems because it seems when you wrtie them that you are showing a bit of you're own soul. this poem paints a beutiful picture for m
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Merry meet,
Thank you for your wonderful comments. I'm glad that you enjoyed my work.
Amythest
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Hey this is so cute. I like the fantasy of the thought. And how unicorns, flying horses, and other wonderful creatures are in your santuary. I personally liked the first stanza and thought it flowed very well. Like I said I liked this poem. Liked the idea of a santuary... where you can meet all the creatures of your imagination. Where a person can express themselves and not care what others think. This was a great write and I did enjoy it very much. Thanks for sharing it.
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great write
like it immensely
only thing I hsve probem with is "sanctuary AGAINST the world"
always thought sanctuary is place of worship, devotion etc. which I take to mean as something positive. you make it sound like a bunker to hide in to be protected from the world, life or whatever.
as I don't feel religion or anything cannot really flow with you here.
mayby you meant your SELF being contained without intervention from whatever goes on outside (in the world, life or whatever.
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Merry meet,
Thank you for your applause and for commenting on my work. The use of sanctuary in my poem has no religious meaning to it. It is meant as a place to go where the world can not intrude when you need some "me" time. A place in my imagination.
Amythest
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immature, little-girlish
Hi Amythest,
First thing to point out that was a pretty big distractor was you bizarre line breaks. The first two were the worst, appearance wise it looks like you began writing one long sentence & couldn't fit it all into one line. L1's choice of break was more of a rock to read over, rather than a river, metaphorically speaking. L1 should have stopped @ 'abound' & cont. on L2. This, I believe, would be the same if you were writing w/ a scheme or free vs.
Basically, I believe if you are going to be brave enough to write an attempted poem on fantasy, you have to be profound, & have an auro of passion & depth for why you would choose unicorns & hobbits, that not many people have.
Lastly, other than the first two line breaks, I didn't find the worst piece I'd ever seen, but not the anywhere near the best. It was grey, just there, w/ no stirs, nothing horrible but nothing holding substace.
ciao
christin -
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Merry meet,
That was the point of the contest. Gnomes are not hobbits, totally different species. Thank you for reading and commenting.
Amythest
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my sanctuary against the world. Wow. What an amazing title. Your place of escape sounds very similar to mine. It is absolutely magnificent to see someone else who imagines the same land as you. Maybe... the sanctuary exists, after all.
~ Kerri
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Merry meet,
Thank you for your applause and for commenting on my poem. Fantasy lives in my Santuary.
Amythest
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PIXIE TAG!!
I am here to visit your poem and touch it with my love and say "Hello from the Enchanted Realm!" I am delighted to meet you and now it is YOUR turn to visit another poet from the Realm and Pixie Tag that person's poetry.
Jeneralix
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Merry meet,
Thank you for your Pixie Tag and your generous applause.
Amythest
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ahh - Inviting
A wonderful sanctuary in deed! One where only the splendors of nature are invited, along with all of it's magnificent creature and the ones we bring to life.
I think you brought us all with you this time, if only for a peek... sure was worth coming with you. Wonderful Job
Ron
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Merry meet,
Thank you for your applause and for commenting. I'm glad that you enjoyed my sanctuary, please feel free to come any time you need refreshing.
Amythest
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PIXIE TAG!
I am a visiting Pixie who loves sitting here in your poem by the babbling brook!
I just plain feel right at home here in this enchantment you have written. 
NOW it's your turn to tag another Pixie. 
Please...
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Merry meet,
Thank you for the Pixie Tag and for your wonderful applause.
Amythest
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Soothing
I liked this.
It was both flowery and exceedingly simple. I admire that skill. Your sanctuary seems very serene and soothing, and a place you can retreat to when reality hands out too many lemons.
Again, very nice, and keep it up Mum!
Tamaska
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Merry meet,
Thank you my daughter for your applause and for your wonderful comments since I know that you don't really care for light fantasy.
Love You
Amythest
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Thank you for a wonderful descriptive sanctuary. C
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Merry meet,
Thank you for your applause and your comments.
Amythest
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