An unexpected scent
momentary and fleeting ~
lifts the corners of my world
higher than the moon
breathing in
every last memory I made
and I sway here
where my childhood summers linger
gently beside the blue
holding me tighter than my parents ever could...
Author notes
prompt ~ My sanctuary
A contest entry
- Quickie-Prompt-10 x 10 lines-An hour to write....on..... by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended July 15, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A very good piece. I like the way the entire thing leaves tiny chills, but still a softer side too. very creative, and I love your phrase
"lifts the corners of my world
higher than the moon"
Deffinately a creative turn of phrase! -
Ooh, "higher than the moon" (You really love alluding to it...so do I, but not nearly as well as you).
"breathing in every last memory I made"
This makes me think of your moving situation right now.
"gently beside the blue"
Nice!!
And the last line...not exactly chilling, but it definitely leaves something less-than-fuzzy.
Very cool!!
Congrats on the HM.
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Ah..this is heaven...and I am with you in heart..you have explored a heaven to me....dear one...I love this and am going to bookmark this..Lovely!
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Gorgeous! Love, C
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So agree...another beautiful sanctuary
the Ocean...mighty of poem written for this lovely
image ...thankyou for sharing your oceans breath with us!
way to write! I love the ocean's nature music.
ears/Seattle
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