Birds sweetly singing in the trees
A gentle warm wind or a soft cool breeze
Soft music playing makes it heaven on earth
But not really heaven for what its' worth!
Just give me a corner, a space of my own
Where I can be myself and be all alone
Voices gone, and no longer that ring
Of doorbells, telephones and life's annoying things
Quietness brings restoration to our lives
God ordered it, it makes me thrive!
Author notes
The ultimate heaven on earth would be a beautiful place out in nature alone..but few of us have that experience very often..Often a place we all want is a place where we get away from the noise..As I have heard...Silence is Golden.. I wonder why?..(Photo credits Photobucket)
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie-Prompt-10 x 10 lines-An hour to write....on..... by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended July 15, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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BANDITS UNITED: What a lovely presentation for this poem - so easy to read and understand. SUch a lovely picture as well. LIked the rhythm, rhyme andthoughts you shared in these lines. How nice to review some of your earlier writes as well.
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Bandits UNITED
Very lovely, i loved the imagry.
Quietness brings restoration to our lives
God ordered it, it makes me thrive!
this is my favorite line. Well done
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Bandits United!
This is a lovely poem about the natural world that makes you want to go out and embrace its sights and sounds. I liked the sense of solitude, of being one with nature and its rejuvinating effect on our spirits. Congratulations on the trophy.
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Bandits United!
Impressive! Your imagery is fantastic...I've read it now a few times, and going to read again...I love your picture of inspiration, it is reflected in your words and has peace and beauty throughout and letting the mind linger on certain thoughts
Congrats on the bronze, well deserved
~Lilac
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Bandits United
A heavenly poem! What a lovely penning this is... makes the soul feel serene and at ease with beautiful nature.
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BANDITS UNITED!!
Rosemary,
Your words and this lovely tranquil picture are so mutually complimentary. I dare say it will be hard now to think of one and not the other! Excellent poetic expression which most readers should be able to relate to. I also appreciate your disclaimer: Soft music playing makes it heaven on earth
But not really heaven for what its' worth! As ideal as this place seems it will not compare to what is waiting in the hereafter.Thank you for sharing this delightful and compelling poem.
Write On!
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic Bandit
today because WE CARE! God Bless!
Brother Dennis
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Bandits United
I agree with every word in the wonderful quickie poem. I love my family, my job and my friends, but I would love an hour a week all by myself to sit on the beach and watch the waves. I don't want to think about anything but the majesty of nature and the beauty that surrounds. I enjoyed this poem very much. Peace, Liz
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Bandits United!
Congrats on the 
trophy! This is the purfect 
bed time read for me. What a delight. 
Love that pix. I'm bringing it with me to envision in my mind's eye as I pray 
hoping to fall asleep decently tonight. It's been an intense day & I so love that I'm given a reminder now that I need to wind down & 
I'm 
This has the perfect content, rhyme & time. 
You ended this on a fine note reminding us what He commanded us to do: rest on the Seventh Day Sabbath! 
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Oops!
Forgot to ask you to take a look at something for me. 
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BANDITS UNITED!!!
a beautiful poem you have penned here, dear sis. it has such a soothing tone to it. the words bring such emotion with them, filled with vivid imagery. thank you for showing us what amazing talent you have. keep writing! God bless you always`
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BANDITS UNITED!!!
Oh I can so relate to this beautiful poem. I have several of those quiet corners (mostly somewhere in nature), where nobody is bothering me. Nice photo too.
Well deserved Trophy.
~Titia~
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Bandits United!!
Since I already visited earlier
I am back~ Woot~
Wish I could give You more clappies...
Congratulations again on Your shiny!
-throws confetti-
Woot~
Thank You for sharing this Rose
Best wishes in all You do
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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BANDITS UNITED
A well deserved Bronze. This poem makes me homesick for the Pocono Mountains of Pennsylvania. My heaven on earth. A beautiful poem to match this beautiful picture.
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HOODWINKED ! ! !
A plaintiff plea for solitude,peace and quiet in a nicely rhymed and flowing
poem couched in some pleasant well chosen imagery congratts on the bronze
trophy.......Well Done...George.....
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Bandits United!
Congratulations on the Bronze
What a beautiful serene poem that locks around my soul & has me appreciating the beauty and spirituality Wonderfully penned
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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First, i love that picture. It in itself is so relaxing for the soul. Your poem did indeed speak of the beauty of this place and the comforting feeling you get from being there, in the silence, in the arms of nature...relating to whomever you care to speak to at that moment. Well done.
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yep..take away tech. and we get bliss..kinda remind me of the book silent spring..,nice job w/ this poem..u paint nature perfectly..
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Re: My Sanctuary, My Heaven on Earth!
Beautiful poem and picture! Rosemary, this a very fine work, a super 10 x 10, if I know what that is (10 lines - each line of 10 syllables?) -- great imagery and sentiment. I really like this one and love your poetry style / craft. This one makes me fell aware of the need for peace and quiet that I often seek, too! Very good work, friend!
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A beautiful picture painted with your words.
I must tell you, though, it made my eyes hurt to read the pink font - it's really quite hard on the eyes!
Other than that, however, I love it! To have a space of your own where you can be all alone is truly a treasure. True that quietness brings restoration! We humans are such creators of noise!! The image of such a place as you describe makes me long for one of my own.
One type-o I saw in line 4: "its'" should be "it's" (it is). -
oh auntie this is beautiful!! SO beautiful! congrats on the Bronze it was well deserved. I would love to have a place like this, it sounds like something wonderful. Awesome write,
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Beautiful picture in words. If we want to get closer to God, nature would be the place to be.
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Oh My~~
This is a Beauty and a place I would Love to go-
Serene also heals the Spirit~
Love the rhyme and words: Voices gone...
Gosh that would be Paradise
The city can be noisy~ I'm In
just the scent of freedom in the trees-
Excellent!!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Well Versed,
Thanks for sharing here sweet rose angel.
Alone from the way of the everyday world. awe, you're on to something big!
I like this idea, and it makes me want to take off to no-where. (Way far from here.)
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver.
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Oh god what I wouldn't give for this!!! Love, C
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I agree...
lovely poem about the beauty of peace..being with one's
self in sheer silent moments.
perhaps that is why I enjoy gardening...the flowers
and critters offer me peace.
way to write..tender poem!
ears/Seattle
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