How long has it been?
Oh yeah, almost 2 years!
But you know what
The only changing my feelings have done?
Well, when you walk by,
I almost can't breath.
And when you look at me,
I really almost die!
My knees shake like jello,
And my heart is on turbo boost.
My head spins in circles,
And my stomach does gymnastics.
My feelings have only changed
Because my love for you has grown.
I never thought I'd love you this long,
But it's been two years!
For goodness sake,
Open your eyes!
I still love you like crazy...
I would say true love never dies.
Author notes
I took the title 'True Love Never Dies'. It's for Daniel. I hope this works!
~Koko~
A contest entry
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600 points, ended August 10, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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this is good Koko. keep up the good work, and have a nice day. -slick99
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I like this. haha, I figured you would write about him
-Well, when you walk by,
I almost can't breath.
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I can definitely relate to those lines. Hah. Good poem =) Thanks for entering & good luckk !! ♥
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well it seems like it needs more description especially in the closing... The ending ehh.. needs some work
and the entry too...
you left me hanging in here;
But you know what
The only changing my feelings have done?
needs more sturcture and more detail
the rest was nicely pictured and very dramatic
great job!
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