Torn apart by a war
That they did not start
A love that is beyond measures
Behind their families these lovers met
Their hearts filled of heated love
The questions in her eyes
He answers in no words
A love that was said not to be.
Lasts throughout history
Author notes
As spoken before forbidden love is the sweetest.
I wrote this in 5th grade when i was reading romeo and juliet so its not my best but for a ten/eleven year old i thought it was good.
Option #4: write a poem about a forbidden or restricted love <3
A contest entry
- Romeo and Juliet Contest by misshugglebugglez.
626 points, ended November 23, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites round contest #1 by serenity silvermoon.
425 points, ended December 27, 2008, 86 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think of the title?
Comments
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wow, that is great! i loved it from the very first line! "Torn apart by a war that they did not start"...
you're right that is very good for a fifth grader =D
i thought this was wonderful
great job, thanks for entering =)
-adria
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I was reading this and I thought mhmmm well all right now pretty good...but sounds like Romeo and Juliet. lol You had a lot of talent for an 11 year old! I am excited to see how you write now.
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Yes, you are right!
I picked on the Romeo and Juliet theme. Thought you showed promise also. I hope to see a truly dark, deep piece that shows your talent as it is now. Have a good day!
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