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Lost in a touch

I clung to the substance

of things

lost in illusions

that could never be

 

strummed rib cage with bare bone sentiments

searched on street corners of hope

 

sweet cycles of love

rotate

pressed between fingers

of private pleasure

pinned against reality

as ink collides; weeping colors

 

words never go away…

they hide, seeking an exit

from lips that quiver

lost in everyday poetry

 

painted pictures interact with pretty colors

…illusions that mingle in the mind

 

pretending behind hungry bones

as art moves us in ways the mind can only imagine

 

angels weep behind the sun

and I finally find myself

 

a pale shade of existence

starved for a mere crumb

 

…bent

a bit broken

 

but still

 

able to touch love

 

 

7/14/08 

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Inspired: Image one:by *j4d3

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  • Rowan gold member
    August 18
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    Congratulations sweetie!!!

    • zochit2me gold member
      August 18
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      Why thank you sweet lady, but was informed this was judged by moderator and not host...
      He is very annoyed about it...

      I hope you are doing well

      ♥Becky♥

      • Rowan gold member
        August 18
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        And so he should be, I think that sucks personally.
        But hey, you are a poet, tried and true.
        Even if he didn't agree, someone loves your work besides
        me, and all the commenters below.
        Kathleen

        • zochit2me gold member
          August 18
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          Oh hell yeah I totally agree with him being pissed off about it. I certainly would be and think it sucks wind as well. Don't blame him one itsy bitsy bit

          Grrrrrrrrrr....

          ♥Becky♥

        • zochit2me gold member
          August 18
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          Oh hell yeah I totally agree with him being pissed off about it. I certainly would be and think it sucks wind as well. Don't blame him one itsy bitsy bit

          Grrrrrrrrrr....

          ♥Becky♥

  • Hetha gold member
    August 1
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    This is truly awesome! You are being favorite'd.

  • This is SO BEAUTIFUL....just like the author! You certainly have a way with words! Very descriptive and subtily sensual! Nicely written Becky!

  • oh wow!

    this just took my breath away! i'm so blwon away by the beauty that lies in those deep words! your emotions lifted my spirit and your last few lines just gave me a rush of lovely emotions! this was truely a brilliant poem! keep penning!


  • Faithbound gold member
    July 16

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    Stunning Becky. I have tried to stay away completely but cannot...lol. I have cut way back. Love this piece. I will reopen your contest when things calm here in a couple of weeks hon. Love ya.


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    July 15

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    Glad you still can..
    It is nice when we do.




  • Rowan gold member
    July 15

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    Your work is always full of movement, and moving. Great ending.
    I'm so glad you still believe it's touchable hon.



  • this has just such wow strong imagery

    amazing



    Cind

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