Disgraced I turn away.
I can no longer stay
Here with passions unreturned.
The very soul within me burned
No place to run, no place to turn
At the end of the day.
I see a dragonfly,
It sweetly flutters by
Oh how my heart, on feathered wings
Would love to fly and run and sing
Happiness, this would truly bring
If dreams held no goodbyes.
An infinite disease,
Inability to please
Something, anything or one.
Sometimes I would just like to run
Or wish this had never begun
Or could end with ease.
To be myself again
Oh, I remember when
This affliction wasn't here
Irreverent, yet so austere,
The only thing I now hold dear
Is my writing pen
Who I once was, she taunts
Overwhelms all my wants
The phantom of what I used to be
I so wish I could refind me
If only I could somehow see
How to end the haunts.
Author notes
a wordbank entry, my first. You could probably tell that by its quality, but whatever.
~Disgrace
~Passion
~Infinite
~Feathers
~Dragonfly
~Heart
~Affliction
~Irreverent
~Phantom
~Dreams
If I missed any words, you can kill me.
I was told to put "Rainbows Have Elbows Of Golden French Frys" in here, and would like to remind the reader I do know how to spell fries... I;ve never thought of rainbows that way either.
Well here you go also, if you think of a title for this, please tell me.
A contest entry
- Word Bank - Flexible Rules (Visit, Ye Who Be The Bravest Hearts And Pancakes) by Asabouros..
700 points, ended July 28, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh my
Somehow I missed this one. I really like it and you definitely used great wording and rhyme on this one. You could call it "run"? Love ya...
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Nice job with the rhyming, and the word bank. Word banks often make weaving a poem together difficult, but you did a nice job. Congrats on the bronze.
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I loved the rhyming scheme you had here, because I hardly noticed it, the rhymes were that fluid. The ending line was really haunting in a sad way.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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Wow, that's a tough one... This is beautifully written. I couldn't stop reading it, and yet, thinking of a title seems impossible. How about something like, 'Finding Me,' or something like that?
JADE RAYNE*
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Oh, silly me, I forgot to mention! Though the subject is a bit over used in poetry, this one is not as mind-numbingly boring and repetitive as the others
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Wow, I really do like this, it's not stunning but I do like it.
You didn't miss any words, and thanks for putting the random Rainbow thing in the AN.
The way each stanza ends interrupts the flow greatly, but that is one of the qualities I like about this
You had a few very touching lines with some rubbish in between but I think lines such as
"Happiness, this would truly bring
If dreams held no goodbyes."
really make up for that.
I only can think of one error in this and that is
"Oh how my heart, on feathered wings"
I wish there was a comma after "Oh"...
Over all a very nice piece, thanks for entering and not over crowding my mind with big words (but 'austere' was a nice touch
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