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Poem for an old man

Life's grayed cellular division
can never lame true inclination
nor can whitened follicle fibers
at least not beneath appearance
and ordinary physical functions
where lions yet create decibels
in close range to their desires
 
Whist bristled by the brief span
medicine does offer some buttons
to disburse cobwebs in most cases
and even cause circus-like closeness
if sentiments choose not to confine
and dribble remains at a bare minimal
with expectations of enlargement high 

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  • Dalaney gold member
    July 28, 2008
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  • tara wilson gold member
    July 15, 2008

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    LOL....this is really good, a little sad tone at first with a humorous ending


  • malmadre gold member
    July 15, 2008

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    Not being able to pee because of physical problems, is quite different from just not having a bathroom near...dribbling even when you are not trying, thank goodness, I dont have a prostate but still have to be careful when laughing or sneezing..ah! the folly of being old.


  • Tattboyspet
    July 15, 2008

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    You know, I've always enjoyed old people: they have so much wisdom and expertise, but alas, as you so aptly put in this write, sometimes medication is needed because the body cannot keep up with the spirit
    I enjoyed this one thoroughly - I detected respect here as well (which made me smile) .... yep yep yep - enjoyed this one too!!!


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      July 15, 2008
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      Thank you. The first stanza is meant to be somewhat dignified. The second is me laughing with the old feller.

      • Tattboyspet
        July 15, 2008
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        but it's still sad that they have so much to give and yet they have to rely on other things for so much ... ~sigh~
        it just makes me sad: old people should be treated with the utmost respect and that's not how it is in this day and age (but that's a different story and I'm not going to get going on that line of thought lol!)

        you like old people too huh???

        • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
          July 15, 2008

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          Well yeah. They remind me of my grandparents. People who made me breakfast food for dinner and who felt that everything had it's importance. *gets weepy for a second*

          • Tattboyspet
            July 15, 2008
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            the moment I read your title I got weepy! lol!
            but enough of that now ~shaking head vigorously~ think of Ash


  • Cannonsfire
    July 14, 2008

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    lol Kept thinking of the prostate in the end of this lol..damn I can't get it out of my head now


  • PerfectImperfection
    July 14, 2008

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    I knew what it was the second I read!

    Very poetic, I bet that man thanks God every second of that 'wood' too! I know, I said it... blah blah.. lmao. Great write!!!!


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    Where is he? He sounds like my dream man I could take this so many ways.. But as your usual, another awesome write!


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      July 14, 2008
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      Really? I only meant it to be taken one way. It's a poetic Viagra advertisement. lol

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