Tonight's the night for the big surprize
A black blindfold to cover your eyes
It's your birthday, therefore a special treat
I've bought strappy 4 inch heels to adorn your feet
Thirty-five minutes later we arrive
The "No Tell Motel", yeah it's a dive
I choose a theme room, no nieghbors at all
Scream all you want, no banging on the wall
I guide you gently thru room 68's door
The stale smell of old sex and disinfectant filled the air forever more
I release your eyes and hand you a box
The tag read "To My Gorgeous Fox"
You opened the box with such haste
Put on the gown in a quickened pace
You were over-welmed at receiving something so sexy and new
I was tickled deeply inside at what I was about to do
Your moment in the spotlight, I gave you to shine
Then ripped off that gown and slapped your behind
"Now let the games begin", I shouted with glee
"Don't forget you owe me!"
You resigned with a sigh and said "Do what you will"
"I'm a big girl, I know how to swallow a pill."
"On your knees bitch and don't utter a word"
"Say not a thing, only my voice is to be heard"
Behind your back I bind your wrist
Then your lips I gently kissed
Your neck was chained, leashed and collared
Then I pulled your hair until you hollered
"You're a little slave girl to do as I please"
"You got damn slut, you no good tease"
I took out my cock and slapped your face
My throbbing member, your lips trace
"Open your hole cunt and taste this man"
I'm ramming it down as far as I can
Suck it harder, don't you bite
Use your skill bitch, get it right
I've got your hair, I'm about to explode
Take it deeper and drink this load
You said 68 and I owe you 1
And I say Now bitch this game is done!
Author notes
This piece really has strong content. I hope no one gets offended by this. I usually sock it to the guys, so I thought I'd give it a try from the other side.
Written January 6th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- A Everybody Contest, Haiku, Limerick, Dark Abstract, Adult Erotic by theredcatjazzoflove.
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this as really amazing!!!!!!
i loved this,
and i really wish i had your talent.
first off, the title was amazing
and then the writing just blew me away.
thank you bby.
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wow this was kind of funny i thought it was going to be boring but it ended up being better thna what i thought
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fantastic
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YOUR A A SIZZLING MUTHA FUCKER DAMMIT! WOOO you made my contest hard i know that i appreciate this write you a hot piece of ass and its not a lot of artst i can tell that to and of coase you can role with me DAMN i like shit like this you rocked this were you horney when you wrote this?
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good
Hot-ness..um.. i need some alone time for this one. -
Another great poem by you. Awesome write. Different than the other but just as good. Tnx for entering my contest.
Much love,
Shanna -
I've tried writing from a male perspective before, and more often than not the piece came out strangled and forced. It is hard to put yourself on the other side and assume a completely unfamiliar persona. You were able to convincingly write from the male perspective, and even more so, sound like a man would in this circumstance ("Open your hole cunt and taste this man")
The rhyme, in my opinion, took away from the erotic intensity of the poem and somehow added humorous understones. I would have preferred it better if the intensity would have been preserved. Nonetheless, a very interesting and well done piece.
Thank you for entering.
Anais -
Go for it. It can be fun. Signed, Forever The Mistress
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This poem makes me want to be man handled . This is excellent stuff.
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simple erotic.
This one deserves a 21 cum salute. Fantastic. -
holy shit i love this poem, keep writing.
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Another Great One
Yeah, that's a great reply to 68 and I Owe U One. You might enjoy some of works...kind of the same caliber. Try me later and tell me what you think. -
kind of scary.. I don't think that was very nice, but hey it was good. I still don't get why it's under abuse? But oh well, that chick must have been very happy to get slapped in the face by your dick.
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thanks for the comment,why don't you try reading 68 and I owe you 1 (hers) seeif that sparks some more ideas. tell me what you think.
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great
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GRREAT!
Different, definitely different...but also VERY good. Perhaps I enjoyed it a little too much though. Definitely something I would like to print and give to my boyfriend. Perhaps spark some ideas
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