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blessings of yours....

Missing image
Oh God

you have bequeathed me the eyes
to betoken the rightness

not twisted into the fallacy
not conducting like the unsightliness
not supreme like an autocrat

amongst all my fibs of this creation
my aiming desire is expected

as yet my eyes are
not countering-evidential
blessings of yours

Oh God...

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The Prompt:

Where there's breath...There's hope!

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  • Away From the Sun
    September 26, 2008

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    Just...EXCELLENT!

    I LOVE this!!!

    Oh, my...the humility you portray in the presence of HIS perfection...I feel this myself, every single day!

    And I cannot counter HIS evidence, with my eyes or with my brain...

    I'm not good with words so I hope this says what I mean - or that others can understand?

    God bless you and may you write more in His glory, my friend!

    Debbie




  • unavailable
    September 3, 2008

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    very nice.

    like this.....

    not twisted into the fallacy
    not conducting like the unsightliness
    not supreme like an autocrat

  • mcheadle
    September 3, 2008
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    How humble we can be

    the master lets us be ourself and through His powere we are what we are and can be...mac


  • skye01 gold member
    July 20, 2008
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    May we always see through reality to the truth of now. Good write


  • DeGraw
    July 20, 2008
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    Deep insight!

    A poem of depth and perception of great magnitude!
    Congratulations on your win!
    Regards,
    Jennifer


  • Katie Lazette
    July 19, 2008

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    Nicely written. The last stanza I really like. I also like that the beginning and the end are the same.
    Very well penned, my friend.


  • stavykm gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    So Beautiful & True

    Just what I needed to read. Where there's breath...There's hope! This is just a very insightful poem and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this humble spiritual poem. Thank you for sharing your beautiful gift to write poetry with me.
    Many Blessings
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie


  • Never.Give.Up silver member
    July 19, 2008

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    This was simply beautiful, I love the lines;


    as yet my eyes are
    not countering-evidential
    blessings of yours

    Oh God...


    A wonderful write and I wish you Wonderful ideas for the future.

    Rose


  • BluesMan gold member
    July 16, 2008
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    Spoken as one who is truly on the path to enlightenment Thank you for this beautiful entry into my contest


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    July 15, 2008

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    hope,

    never ending faith,

    always leads you home.

    your passion shines always.

    equisite

    God bless...


  • rhondasail
    July 15, 2008

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    ..."as yet"..this to me is the pivotal thought here...a cry of confident acceptance and hope. I always enjoy reading your poetry, my friend...you are a beautiful soul. Peace always and very best to you in the contest. Rhonda


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    July 14, 2008
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    such deep thought in this one my friend...


    Cindy


  • Sensuity
    July 14, 2008

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    A wonderful poem ....a heart felt cry to the Almighty.I was wonderfully written...Hope to read more of your poetry.

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