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Twilight story: Losing Bella (Edward's Version)

Walking just existing
waiting for it to pan out
nothing of importance
until it happened

Just a normal day

then I saw you at lunch
beauty in plain sight

so normal yet extraordinary

 

My life so bleak

so boring and dull

now filled with brilliance

and an empty space now full

 

My moonless night

forever there

never changing

then you came one so fare

 

A meteor

a shooting star

blinds me

my way is clear

 

Knowing the danger

I ignored my better judgement

hurting you every day

it seemed like harmless fun

 

I knew I must leave

I could hurt you, I could snap

this would hurt you more

if only i'd seen that

 

I knew this was right

yet I felt hollow

dreading each day

filled with sorrow

 

Thought of coming back

but something stopped me

until enough was enough

I would come back sadness free

 

Heard you were so hurt

you jumped off a cliff

thought you had died

hard I plunged into grief

 

I asked them

I wanted to be gone

to be with you

no matter what

 

I saw you in the ally

sure I was dreaming

"wow they are quick"

yet I still heard you screaming

 

Not a dream

this was real

never thought about

how this could feel

 

Together forever

never once apart

losing you again

would break my heart

 

 

 

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  • amarcus92
    January 23

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    pretty good yourself. Yea, I know 9/11 wasn't his fault, it just fit lol...However, the Patriot act is VERY inconstitutional. It allows the government to spy on you...and No Child left Behind made it so there were less students per teacher, which is good, but they didn't provide enough money to fund it. So, the outcome was the same education at a higher cost, which crippled many school districs, including the one i'm in.


  • bananasfoster42
    December 15, 2008

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    this is off then chain!!! i agree with imagine 732, the last stanza is an explosive ending! thanks for the entry!


  • imagine732
    July 18, 2008

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    awww..this is amazing!!!!..the last two lines ar my favorite!
    keep writing
    keep smiling
    keep the peace!


  • Chocoholic156
    July 16, 2008

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    I think that you got the story down right, but it needs to be shorter. And it sounds like you are speaking, I always picture poetry as singing, not just a lecture. Just some advice. Good luck!


  • Valley Girl silver member
    July 15, 2008
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    I can't wait for the shorter version! This is REALLY good!


  • BeautifulNitemare
    July 15, 2008
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    I liked it =) I love how you point out that she's normal but extraordinary!

  • Valley Girl silver member
    July 15, 2008

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    *This looks like a good write, but the rules are 5 to 20 lines max. I will give you time to go over it, just let me know when you are finished, and I will read it, Thanks*

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