Bound within this
binary vision
Senses stir to encounter
desire doubled in pose
of arched promise
An azure fantasy
tempting touch
and taunting need
Hesitation passed,
I plunge into
learning's longing
Merging a trio of
delightful discovery
Author notes
Prompt: Pic #1 (credit to GreenHrtPaleMoon)
In a list
A contest entry
- QUICKIEEEEE! by GreenHrtPaleMoon.
400 points, ended July 14, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a delightful look at the senses posed as double. The fantasy and touch with longings. Your clarity and consistent use of poetic technique bring the reader into your realm.
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This is really great, and the rythem just wanted you to keep in read.
Congrates on the gold.
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You are very talented...you make it look like it is so easy to write...WOW is all I have to say.
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Wow! AWESOME WRITE! Congratulations on the Gold!
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Congrats on the gold!!
Such a mix of emotions within your words, truly a superb read, so pleased its a gold hunni! Congrats
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I want you to know that now that I have been reading your work I know what you are doing and it’s absolutely brilliant. Since I was dubbed the “Queen of Form” on this site, I have the power to grant titles. By the power vested in me, I hereby dub you the “Queen of Alliteration.” No one does it as well as you do!
Love,
Amera♥
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I also thought this write was obvious and sucked and struggled big time with it.. go figure.. always the one's that seem to place hey! lol
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really?? I've only just started doing it recently.. and I know others that I think are sooo much better.. but I am sincerely honoured that you would think so hun!!
And yes.. you most definitely are the Queen of Form!! There is nothing you couldn't write in form.. and no style that you couldn't master!
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An azure fantasy
tempting touch
and taunting need
gee's your winning some golds..but no wonder
...excellent writing
and loved the ending too SiS
Cind
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What a truly groovy picture...it's got that nifty reversed..picture thingy going on.
"Bound within this
binary vision"
Binary vision...awesome phrase. Although...you could say 'Bound by binary vision' for less words...or maybe not.
"desire doubled in pose
of arched promise"
Has a sexy vibe with 'desire' and 'arched promise'...but it's not dirty yet.
I like these two lines. (: "doubled in pose" is just too clever, since there are 2 sides to the same person. =D
"An azure fantasy
tempting touch
and taunting need"
Love the word 'azure'. =P
"taunting need"<--I LOVE THIS!!!! Makes me think of procrastination, or a deprivation of sex...or something.
"learning's longing"
Cool alliteration..
"Merging a trio"
From double to trio...neato
=)
Kudos on your Gold Jacks
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Oh, my goodness. Imagining the possibilities.....
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You struggled? Where? I can't see it. lol Your usual brilliance is all I read!
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It has the seductive haunting feel to it, well done hun. Love, C
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What an awesome take here!!! You just blew my mind - the course you chose for the prompt tis simply amazing!!! Excellent word play and seductive presence. Incredible write!
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ooh. Deliciously sensual. I see this IS how you like to wake up. *Grins* 'binary vision' great line! 'an azure fantasy' also kick ass. This whole piece was very strong and well written!
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Okay - I was gonna try to wake you up with a bit of break dancing myself lol
Good luck my dear!
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*shake, shake shake, shakeshake, shake your booty shake your booty* good luck!
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Wahoo
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I'm doing the freaky dance!!! yeeeahh!!!!!
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Woot! Freaky dance is awesome
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yes.. but when people look at you weird ou can't help but..... GET FREAKIER!!!!
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