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Discovery

 

  Bound within this

  binary vision

 

  Senses stir to encounter

  desire doubled in pose

  of arched promise

 

  An azure fantasy

  tempting touch

  and taunting need

 

  Hesitation passed,

  I plunge into

  learning's longing

 

  Merging a trio of

  delightful discovery

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Pic #1 (credit to GreenHrtPaleMoon)

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A contest entry

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  • chiefmac
    August 7
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    This is a delightful look at the senses posed as double. The fantasy and touch with longings. Your clarity and consistent use of poetic technique bring the reader into your realm.

  • This is really great, and the rythem just wanted you to keep in read.

    Congrates on the gold.

    Rose
  • You are very talented...you make it look like it is so easy to write...WOW is all I have to say.

  • Valley Girl gold member
    July 15
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    Wow! AWESOME WRITE! Congratulations on the Gold!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 15

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    Congrats on the gold!!

    Such a mix of emotions within your words, truly a superb read, so pleased its a gold hunni! Congrats


  • Amera gold member
    July 15

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    I want you to know that now that I have been reading your work I know what you are doing and it’s absolutely brilliant. Since I was dubbed the “Queen of Form” on this site, I have the power to grant titles. By the power vested in me, I hereby dub you the “Queen of Alliteration.” No one does it as well as you do!

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • I also thought this write was obvious and sucked and struggled big time with it.. go figure.. always the one's that seem to place hey! lol
    • really?? I've only just started doing it recently.. and I know others that I think are sooo much better.. but I am sincerely honoured that you would think so hun!!

      And yes.. you most definitely are the Queen of Form!! There is nothing you couldn't write in form.. and no style that you couldn't master!

  • An azure fantasy

    tempting touch

    and taunting need



    gee's your winning some golds..but no wonder ...excellent writing

    and loved the ending too SiS


    Cind

  • What a truly groovy picture...it's got that nifty reversed..picture thingy going on.

    "Bound within this
    binary vision"
    Binary vision...awesome phrase. Although...you could say 'Bound by binary vision' for less words...or maybe not.

    "desire doubled in pose
    of arched promise"
    Has a sexy vibe with 'desire' and 'arched promise'...but it's not dirty yet. I like these two lines. (: "doubled in pose" is just too clever, since there are 2 sides to the same person. =D

    "An azure fantasy
    tempting touch
    and taunting need"
    Love the word 'azure'. =P
    "taunting need"<--I LOVE THIS!!!! Makes me think of procrastination, or a deprivation of sex...or something.

    "learning's longing"
    Cool alliteration..

    "Merging a trio"
    From double to trio...neato

    =)

    Kudos on your Gold Jacks


  • breedluv
    July 14
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    Oh, my goodness. Imagining the possibilities.....

  • You struggled? Where? I can't see it. lol Your usual brilliance is all I read!


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    July 14
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    It has the seductive haunting feel to it, well done hun. Love, C

  • What an awesome take here!!! You just blew my mind - the course you chose for the prompt tis simply amazing!!! Excellent word play and seductive presence. Incredible write!

  • ooh. Deliciously sensual. I see this IS how you like to wake up. *Grins* 'binary vision' great line! 'an azure fantasy' also kick ass. This whole piece was very strong and well written!

  • Okay - I was gonna try to wake you up with a bit of break dancing myself lol

    Good luck my dear!

  • Angelflower Greeters member
    July 14

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    *shake, shake shake, shakeshake, shake your booty shake your booty* good luck!
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