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Shadow's Desperation


Gaze with dispassion,
Not envisioning [even] the shadow
That surrounds...
Downward glance
Cascading focus – myopic topic...
Tunneling peepers boring away

Blur now, blur then, blurring [remember when]
No penetration, armor’s chinked
Persistence, non-existence
Shrinking evermore
Gawk like a hawk



But if you seek you will find.... me

Author notes

Option #1~~ Regular Quotes ~~
"It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see."

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  • goalsv
    July 16, 2008

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    Nicely done. A great job of showing that it is not what is being looked at but what is being seen that matters. Just like a poem can be read and felt differently by each reader.

  • Asabouros.
    July 15, 2008

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    Cool, very interesting take on the quote, I've not seen a poem with such playful back-and-forth between subjects that could still read so nicely. Pleasant write, best of luck in the contest


  • Sandygram
    July 14, 2008

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    Good Evening

    Hello Wade, Well I must say your poems made me put my thinking cap on. At first I thought of being in a a military vehicle, then my mind thought of a sub, then I even thought well beam me up Scotty. After the third time I went back to the original of looking down the barrel of something with turrets or a armored vehicles. I am probably was off again like the little girl in the bikini. Hey but I did try. Give me an E for Effort. You take care my friend.

    Bless You,
    Sandy


    • shepherd23
      July 14, 2008
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      "It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see."
      it is a play back and forth between the "observer and the observed"
      some look through you rather than at you and some do not want to be seen at all - so what happens when both occupy the same space?
      One gets looked down upon [eventually after being given credit for even existing] and the other shirnks to avoid being seen
      maybe a little deep, but it was the mood of the moment

      sorry you spent so much brain power on my feeble attempt at the quote

      but thanks for your precious time!

      God bless you with peaceful rest tonight

      • Sandygram
        July 15, 2008
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        Good Morning

        Thank you Wade, I so appreciate yoy taking the time to explain. I read it again and now I see it is a great take on the prompt. The last line should have given me a clue before. It is so obvious now.
        And it wasn't a feeble atempt it was a great poem my friend. It is my mind that is feeble sometimes. You take care.Have a wonderful day.

        Bless You,
        Sandy

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