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Aloha ALONE

I spent two weeks in Hawaii

Stayed in a hotel right on the beach

Each night as I gazed out to sea


I watched the moonlight
dance upon the water

as it put a show on just for me


As the waves rolled gently in

pushed by a soft warm breeze

I felt the ocean's mist upon my face


When the waves broke upon the beach

I could feel the soft sand squish between my toes

as the water headed back out to disappear without a trace


Every night as the moonlight danced

I walked upon the beach.
truly the most romantic place that you could ever be


Then I realize that once again
I was all alone

with no-one to share this all with me


I looked around and

all I could see where couples

it was like the world was made for two


As they all walked hand in hand
my hand was empty still

and as I watched, I wondered where is my love so true?

Walking side by side or looking out to sea
entangled in a lovers embrace

and each and everyone had a huge smile upon their face


But as I think back the memory
of a couple in their 80's stands out still

as I look back this memory holds a special place.

I watched them and I realized
they had seen the world
through each others eyes


And as his hand reached up, and held her face
as he gently kissed her lips

I truly almost cried.

Could I, would I ever find
such a sweet love like this

someone to stand by my side


Someone to share the glories
of the world with me

I so want to enter that romantic zone


Or am I forever

doomed to solitude

destined to walk this life  alone

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  • cazzy71
    July 12

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    I heard you speak this

    It was almost as if I have known you for several years and you spoke this to me.Super entry.Thank you.


  • Symphony
    September 30, 2008
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    this was beautiful; in a sad way, to think that someone should stand alone, surrounded by couples - i know of what you mean, for i am single, and have been since breaking up with my boyfriend over a year ago, and even though I know it was the right move for us, it still leaves me lonely at times.


  • Hebz
    August 21, 2008
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    WOw, this's simple capturing

    Thnx for entering & Best of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba


  • Redeemed15
    August 7, 2008
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    Great poem. I truly love it. Good luck!


  • aeolia
    July 31, 2008
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    Ah, you deleted my comment. This piece still doesn't cut it.


  • Lady Wildheart
    July 21, 2008

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    wow...this is truly amazing. I am in a wonderful relationship right now (sorry bout sayin that but i do have a point) and i still felt the agonizing pain of being lost and lonely. how the world does seem as though its made for 2 when your alone. the one couple in their 80's is a fabulous add to this poem. it really shows how when your in love for that long how you know each other so well and can rly read each other to where gentle kisses like that mean the world to the other. this is so compassionate and you write with such vigor? i guess u'd say vigor idk how 2 describe it but I loved it.


  • Deaths Desire
    July 17, 2008

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    I felt your pain and worry and sorrow and felt how you longed and i agree its scary how you suddenly feel alone and isolated when reading your poem !!!! you used raw emotion great work!!!!


  • Emilina
    July 15, 2008

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    this was truly an amazing poem. it made me feel so isolated. you used your true talent and it made a lovely poem
    good luck!


  • techno-tard
    July 14, 2008
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    wow touching and so heartbreakingly true, I hope you find your one...

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