Your heartache is not my fault;
Place the blame on someone else.
Or better yet, be an adult,
and point your finger at yourself.
I’m sorry that it came to this.
I’m so sorry that you feel this pain;
but we both know it’s not my fault,
so what’s the point in casting blame.
You brought tragedy upon yourself,
it’s up to you to work it out.
I will be here if you need me;
that’s what friendship is about.
I once again apologize,
for your blue sky turning black;
but while your finger points at me,
you have three others pointing back.
Author notes
Sometimes it is another person's fault when we go through a tough time, but often, we have to take the time to realize that we are the ones who brought the hard time on ourselves; and quit blaming everything on everyone else.
A contest entry
- prewrites by aeolia.
400 points, ended October 26, 2008, 130 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Bland. It would help to show your readers what you mean instead of telling them so by means of elementary sentences and predictable rhyme.
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Okay, I will, but it hurts a little, so you know... It's hard to say, 'I did this. I've hurt myself; not someone else, but me. I caused this pain.' It's like cutting without the blood... I really did enjoy this poem. You're a great writer.
JADE RAYNE*
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OMG... so true and yea i agree... always blame myself for everything lol
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Wow...I liked this a lot..I love the ending when you were like...
I once again apoligize,
For your blue sky turning black;
But while your fingers point at me,
You have three others pointing back.
That was hot cuz the flow just went so good...very nice.
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This is very true. I wish more people saw it this way. It would save me alot of time The rythmn was good, and the flow was beautiful, It was easily read. Thankyou for sharing this!
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Wow, this one is really different! I do like it, and I think your rythmn and flow it the whole poem was nicely done! Great job
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