What winter winds might tear from tender limbs,
warm Spring replenishes to sunlit knolls
in seasons warm and ripe with nature's hymns
when slumber yields to quickened breath in souls
which dwell beside dark waters, still and deep,
where leaf and bud are kissed by morning dew.
Along a densely wooded shore, I creep
and seek what's hidden there, from mortal's view.
By Laurel Lake, the legends say, the wee
folk dance by light of day when winter snow
has once receded, leaving merrily,
abandoning the earth to things that grow.
Come, stroll down quiet country lanes with me,
as seasons bloom with possibility.
Author notes
I was inspired by a photograph of the home of Edith Wharton, one of my favorite authors. It is a beautiful home on Laurel Lake which she designed herself.
A contest entry
- Rhyming Contest for Sonnets and Villanelles only. by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended July 15, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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It's so easy to see why this one has gold, congratulations and welcome to this wonderful place where we can enjoy your writing. I see a lot of versatility in your poetry. I look forward to reading them all.
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If you are new to ...
writing poetry as you mentioned on your home page, I would chance to say that you have a natural talent and abiltiy and a grand way with words. This sonnet poem is certainly no exception and is well-written and a pleasure to read! You're on a roll! Congrats for the gold! joy
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Great! Every line had something interesting in it, so I won't pick any out, You really deserved the gold for this one.
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This is a good job ...
except for the errors, which should be fixed before judging. You'd be well advised to change the "do" in line one to "might" however. I have a particular bias against using any form of the verb to do with another verb. It's an archaism employed by poets before about 1940 to flesh out a line by cheating with an extra syllable. However, might would work very well there.
In line 3, it would be "nature's hymns", in line 8, "what's hidden there" and "from mortals' view".
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Thank you
You have a keen eye. I appreciate your attention to details I missed and your kindness in bringing them to my attention. The corrections have been made.
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