What happens
when
mankind
stops
c
a
r
i
n
g
and..
becomes
more of
it's own
worst enemy?
Author notes
The prompt The Land of the Dead by ~EShaD was used.
A contest entry
- by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended July 14, 2008, 8 entries
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Comments
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Ok, this is brilliant. I think you're a genius of words, I really do. I love the spacing you used. Interesting and made it seem to have more of a push pull factor and huge question mark feeling than the traditional poem. A strong question to ask. Very well done.
Warmest,
Mylee -
nice
wow! so much summed up in so few words. i really liked it.
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I like the spacing and how you left the interpretation open.
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cool
in such a short poem you got right to the point. very good... keep it up.
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"What if?"
you mean "Why is?"
Or maybe it's just me. I feel that in many ways, it's already turning on itself, which is a shame because nothing progresses when that happens.
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I get what you mean, but I guess I took a different route.
I made it so the picture was the aftermath of the poem.
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This is such a very thought provoking piece. A factual glimpse into the image, and society as a whole. Nice write! Best wishes in the contest!
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very good question, interesting format! i mean that in a good way.
yes, we've collided, but i am only her for a few. i've got a major write i'm working on that will take a lot of my focus. the quickie was just to get my brain working!
best of luck,
tim
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