you dig satie, babe?
man, he's cool, he's totally cool
you never screwed with ol' erik
goin' round on the turntable?
poking along to a gymnopedie is far out, babe
he's laid back, so you lay back, get laid, wow!
that erik satie guy, he dug it, spaced out on absinthe,
like totally out of it, flying over the roofs de paris
in his bisexual little velvet suit
sure sign of a perv, you ask me
not only gymnopedies, babe, gnossiennes
the mother wrote three of those little beauties
what's a fucking gnossienne, you asking,
how the fuck should i know what am i
some walking encyclo-fucking-paedia?
maybe it's some kind of secret knowledge
you know, from the greek 'gnosis'
whassat? you don't care a fuck for greek
well that's way out of order, babe,
i love a moussaka or a kleftiko
washed down with demestika 'n ouzo
so cool, so totally cool, erik the red
joined the communists, so full of dada
so fucking existentialist
cooler than an iceblock up your arse
listen to those pearly notes
chilling out on the woofers
erik was so genuinely your man
hung out with all the great froggies
picasso, massine, diaghilev,
whassat? i know diaghilev was no froggy
he was a fucking russky pansy boy
but what the fuck, satie never went down on him
didn't want spunk on his velvet suit
for fuckin' chrissakes
picasso was a spic? you are fucking joking
i never knew pablo was a paella-basher
wow! you learn something knew
every fucking day, totally cool
play it again erik
you are strictly my kinda guy
Author notes
Maybe if I dedicate it to Keith, that might help. Yeah, why not, give it a bash....
A contest entry
- Gnossiennes by Keith.
600 points, ended July 28, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Make my day! Criticise this and get an earful!
Comments
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I think this started out really great then wandered a little crazy in the last few lines. Nice write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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Lolz, it's so much the opposite of elegant and beautiful that it becomes a taco bell break from the constant, boring, banter poets have marred this site with.
Sounds like someone is truly ranting.
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An interesting write even though I didn't understand a word. Happ trails.
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wtf! what a nasty piece of work this is. if that was your intention you certainly captured this annoying little character very well.
best wishes in the contest,
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Fan bloody tastic. this is the best read today, xx
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An absolute cracker. What more can I say. And dedicated to me, an' a'. Ah'm gettin' a riddie, so ah am.
Excellent verse. I'm glad I invited more entries. Les réponses étaient à la recherche un peu stérile -
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I won honorable mention! Wow! You were sorry to end this contest a little early. Wow! The quality of the entries was astounding, in many ways, from the sublime, to the profound - highs and lows, like Satie's very own music. Wow! In the end, you were bowled over by the crazy re-arrangement of Satie's life. He was a kind of crazy character, after all, but a true genius. And all of the entries reflect that genius in their own ways. Especially mine!
It was great to win an HM. I noticed that all 6 of the entries which didn't win a prettier colour cup, also won an HM. This in NO WAY reduces the incredible honour you have bestowed on me. I may shit myself with excitement.
Oh God, yes, it's severe follow through.....................
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