Brilliant Barnacle Bobby the biker would
boast he bought a beautiful buxom bride
named Betty Blueberg
the body builder.
Betty Blueberg the body builder built a
big bungalow for Brilliant Barnacle Bobby
the biker before a big breakfast of
baked biscuits and beer.
Betty Blueberg the body builder was born
in Boston before Brilliant Barnacle Bobby
the biker bent her bible belief
bewitching her behavior.
Barnacle Bob the biker bewitched Betty
Blueberg the body builder by buying a
bouquet and balancing bouncing Bache
balls between two big boisterous bison.
Betty Blueberg the body builder bought
the big breakfast of baked biscuits and
beer for Barnacle Bob the biker before
bewitchment began.
Betty Blueberg the body builder bit the
bullet by becoming Barnacle Bob the
biker’s beautiful buxom bride
because she was bloody bored.
Author notes
Option #3
Hear this poem recited by AP poet; PerVirtuous
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2000 points, ended July 28, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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OMG~
Oy Girly~ Love this one and what a tongue twister this was
Loved it!!
Excellent take on the prompt and I did not know You had entered or would have been here earlier
I spit on the monitor when I tried to read it outloud and then spit on my Munchkins who heard me spill my guts trying to read this outloud
What a twister this twas
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Humor and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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you're sssooooo bright with these. don't stop. one suggestion though. while i understand that redundancy is one of the characteristics of a tongue twister, i think you can trick the reader into not noticing so much if you switched the order a bit from stanza to stanza..for example: the body builder Betty Blueberg was born
in Boston before Brilliant Barnacle Bobby
the biker bent her bible belief
bewitching her behavior. or: the big breakfast of baked biscuits and
beer for Barnacle Bob the biker was bought by betty the body builder blueberg before bewitchment began.
just a thought. please don't be offended with my nit pickin. your work is always so perfect, there's little else to do but nitpic
very well done. and extremely fun to read.
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Just brilliant! Oh what a tongue twister and I thought PerVirtuous was going to slip over his tongue when I listened to it! He recited this brilliantly and you have penned a great piece. Love the ending too!
This was hilarious!
Thank you so much for the great entry in our contest!
Gaylene
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well.. I did try to read it outloud and got all twisted.. but oh what fun it was!!! 
Brilliant hun.. this gave me a giggle.. especially as I've done bodybuilding! lol
Lots of B words.. aren't they great!?
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Amera, I loved this so much I could just s---
Men, say and do anything to get their way, hum!
Bewitched indeed. Bent her bible belief bewitching her behavior, sounds so selfish and mean, Lets gang up on bob and spank his *Bunny* loved it, great job. love, D.x
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I give! Not even gonna try this one out loud! Yikes!
This is fantastic, as always! You are such a talented poetess, my dear sister! Love it!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Wild how wayward Robert wooed his wench! I wonder how wet the wedding was and if waffles, watermelon and vanilla wafers were served by willing waitresses wearing wastecoats. Whatever. Wonderful writing wife. Have some bunnies.
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Okay, who hid my good teeth?
I've just read, a great little poem and fun to read.
All the best in the contest.
Love
Sue
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LOL
Your good teeth? You nut!
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Brilliant alliteration Amera, very cleverly crafted and I’m glad I did not read this drunk, for I too like to read poetry aloud, *jeeze* it’s tough enough sober! LOL! I think I have a cramp in my tongue…
All the best in the contest dear.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Indeed a tongue twister! I love the last line
"because she was bloody bored." lol
excellent poem, Amera.
Love,
Tay
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As someone who always likes to read outload, at this point I hate you
Great stuff,
Jeff
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