you are the beauty of Africa
the beauty of Sudan
I sure do know that
I know no one understand
they only call you nyian sheluk
they only call you nyian Jur
they only call you, nyian jieng
but I call you, the beauty of Sudan
your shining dark brown eyes
those I long for, to light up my nights
your beautiful skin, so silky so shiny
that I lust for, to kiss and touch me
you are my African queen
my Sudanese beauty
you are my solace
my soul pride
and my soothing
you are the breath
that I breath in
you are my queen
my beauty my soothing
the only Sudanese beauty
In a list
A contest entry
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Really awesome indeed
this is a pretty poem
Good work
Samuel
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well, well
you got me working, lol well
the phrases means
they only call you nyian sheluk (is a trive in Upernile in Sudan)
they only call you nyian Jur (also tribe in south Sudan)
they only call you, nyian jieng (is the generalization of all tribes)
so what the phrases means, is that they only call her the girl of that tribe, the girl of this tribe, and so forth, but they never get to see beyond God's creation and see how beautiful she is, and thats what I am showing in this poem, I am allowing people to see the beauty and not the skin color, or her nationality
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This is so sweet and she is lovely. I wish I knew what the phrases meant that you refer to. Thanks for entering and good luck
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wel well
you got me working, lol well
the phrases means
they only call you nyian sheluk (is a trive in Upernile in Sudan)
they only call you nyian Jur (also tribe in south Sudan)
they only call you, nyian jieng (is the generalization of all tribes)
so what the phrases means, is that they only call her the girl of that tribe, the girl of this tribe, and so forth, but they never get to see beyond God's creation and see how beautiful she is, and thats what I am showing in this poem, I am allowing people to see the beauty and not the skin color, or her nationality
hope that helps a little bit, and thank you
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This is really hard to read with the font colour and background. Maybe you could post the background as an extra picture, if that'd suit you.
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Thank you
hiraeth
I have c hanged the Bg and hope you will come back and read it again, well enjoy and thank you for the comment
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This was beautiful, so descriptive. She's beautiful as well
The only thing I had a problem with was reading the white against the picture.
♥
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your advise
I took your advise, changed the BG and it sure do look better, thats the great part of being honest thank you my dear poet. Hope you enjoyed it
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Yes, I agree!
She is indeed a very lovely lady! Have you ever actually met her yet? I know that would REALLY make your day, huh? Nicely written!
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VeritasLiberte
I have not yet met this woman, I saw her only during the contest for Miss South Sudan and that was all, and I was on my way to Iraq, but I sure do hope to meet her one day, lol thanks for your kind comment
I will make sure to read some of your work
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She is beautiful! What a loving dedication to her,
I can almost see you getting weak in the knees over this beauty.
I see a light on her face and a smile that could melt the toughest heart!
I loved this dedication and declaration of love!
Hugs
~Lisa~
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Lisa, haha
Thank you very much, I know but I must inform you that this is not my girfriend actually, she was one of the Sudanese Models who won a contest that was held in Kansas City in 2007, She is from the same place I am from and I dedicated this Poem to her.
But thank you though, it was nice I will be going through your page now, since I have free time to look around, I have been busy with this contest and reading poems over and over just to compare which one fits my definition of appreciation you know, but yeah thanks -
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Well Legend....
lol to my embarrasment,
i am laughing, but I will still say she is very beautiful and she shines!
Still a great dedication!
By the way do you have a real name i can call you?
~Lisa~
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JOHN
John is my first Name. lol yes I know she is shining star, and have a smile that stole my soul when i first saw her, lol. well have a great day I am judging the contest in a couple of hours, so hope some one else enters to complete the number of entries needed, or i will just judge it with nine, well again Good day there
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