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Rabbits in the morning dew,
a forest walk in spring,
the sound of prolonged laughter
soon a smile will bring.
Falling on my butt, as I often do,
hearing my dog snoring begin,
eating chocolate anything,
give me a giggle and grin.
A bubble bath of lavender,
classical music wending,
the scent of donuts in the air
give smiles without ending.
If I play pranks on my kids,
watch the clouds and Earth spin
while lying in the grass
then the smiles begin.
But most of all, my biggest smiles
come from within my heart
when I help others become
better than themselves.
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A contest entry
- What makes you smile? by silverscent.
525 points, ended July 18, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was beautiful; and so uplifting, you have a great life from the sounsd of it, and, much love within it. This is the sort of life that many look upon enviiously, and most wish they had - particularly in relation to the way of family life. congrats on the trophy
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Beautiful...
you speak to my heart, honey!
Kisses all over!
Galaxy2
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Thanks for the kind comment on my poem. ~ Joyce
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Hello Sprite.
This is a lovely write, the presentation of simple pleasures so often overlooked and taken for granted is observant. Have to admit I can not relate to the "Rabbits in the morning dew", that must be a Disney sponsored mountain to have a view like that hahahah. I also have to say I am puzzled by the lack of rhyme in the last stanza, when it was so prevalent in the others. Anyway, a delighful write, and congratulations on the Gold Trophy.
My regards.
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Thanks for the comments. I decided to have the last stanza not rhyme to make it different. The last of my thoughts was different from the others as it is not a view of things but a life decision. I especially liked the way it flowed and didn't want to change that either as helping others flows naturally from me. It is in my nature. SInce it wasn't a necessity to rhyme in the contest, I felt it was ok to play it this way. Hope this explains things for you. I truly appreciate the way you really examine poems and make astute observations. Thanks. ~ Joyce
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this smile can be endless and radiating....congrats on the trophy
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Thanks, nilav!
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I lovely smile in itself, basically a ballad with many lovely elements and finishing with such an uplifting element.
Great stuff!
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Thanks for your kind comment! ~ J
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This is just what I was looking for when I opened the contest. It's lighthearted, filled with great imagery and not only does it describe what makes you smile, it make the reader smile too. Thanks for entering.
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Thanks so much for the compliment to my poem. I appreciate the gold. ~ Joyce
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