Urgencies explode
In floral dynamite,
A burst of blood
Like blister's trigger
When shoes and skin conflict
And leathers struggle.
Point begins to decimate,
To cause a pause to walking
And decimate good feeling
In the minion to new leather,
Spark a lack of joy,
And actuate an anger unforeseen.
Pain explodes upon the sidewalk.
Points of leather struggle,
Ending with a trip.
A contest entry
- Activate by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended July 31, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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oooh Such a different take on this image and use of the word bank. Very well done and quite creative. I commend you dear poet for this unique blend of imagery. I enjoyed this very much.
I will have a tough time judging this one due to this little gem. Thank you so much. GREAT work here. ~Pamela
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Perfect point!
Been there many times, nothing worse than new shoes and a blister! Great write!
Regards,
DeGraw
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this is really such a descriptive write. great imagery and allows you to see the whole picture. great and well done
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