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things that you go through









it’s not the green
she unwound from her sleeve -
thin threads of yarn
to stitch on your briefs -
which now amounts to nothing but
a withered leaf.

it’s not the bedtime stories
you hear, not what the sounds mean
beyond the subjectivity of your ear.

you may call it in any language
and it won’t come.

for what it is
resides in your arteries.
a geometric function of your heart.
what it is
dances to the symphony of choice.

some bright side sits on the edge of
everything.








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July 14, 2008

for Rehan.

Not sure this is the kind of poetry you go for, it's a bit abstract, but the thing is, try to see the good that comes along with the tough things you feel/go through. It does help sometimes. This is the reason I don't regret even my worst memories, or my worst mistakes.

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  • mystic1409
    December 11, 2008

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    i'm going through a bit of a tough time and this really does help, the silver lining isn't that hard to see you just have to look for it.


  • ea silver member
    August 17, 2008

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    I like how sensory this is and how everything unravels, then takes on the power of knowing it's in the arteries, not in the sense of touch or hearing so much, but something deeper we must heed. And then the final stanza is the coup de resistance! Well done.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    August 16, 2008

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    wow!

    this is such a beautiful dedication! it was moving and it touched my heart! your words are so kind! and pretty wise too... keep penning, and spread the love!

  • vertigo beat
    August 14, 2008
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  • sOuL
    July 15, 2008

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    Thanks to the author, Thanks a lot for writing such a good poem. I am happy to know that you care..
    Good Luck in the contest


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 15, 2008

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    This is wonderful! I really like that you have used such beautiful imagery to create such a bittersweet tone in this piece - and the subjectivity of language and meaning is well placed (and makes me excited because I'm doing Psychology of Language next semester!) - I really enjoyed this piece - and the ending was just perfectly crafted sorry that I seem to be doing nothing but praising you - but I really can't think of anything to critique about this poem - and I tried

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    July 15, 2008

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    i like this is the most bittersweet truth about like, the good can't come without the bad. keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Age of Rain
    July 14, 2008

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    'Geometric' was a wonderful word choice. The images of 'green' living things switched to images or organs well. Your ending was decidedly positive, which I find to be a good thing. But again, your pieces hold a sense of distant thoughtfulness. Its like, your intentions dance before me, but aren't necessary easy to see. Still, I enjoy taking my own messages out of your intricately placed metaphors

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