empty soul
emotionless hole can't be filled
mindless one loosing self control
half dead child
demon in an angel's mask
lock in a darken room
with one wing in hell's fire
going to lose the balance soon
and fall in
don't fret yet
I'll see ya on the other side of the shattered glass
aleast I can promise you that your mask with be broken
and all will be layed out in the open
I'll see ya there on the other side of the shattered glass
Author notes
The i's are meant to be that way
A contest entry
- Pre writes galore! by Lady Michaella.
850 points, ended July 16, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Write Extraganza No Limit by poets whisper.
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Comments
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I like the thought of this and the way it is written ... "demon in an angel's mask" quite a good line. thank you for entering
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This is quite a strange poem.. It isn't beautiful at all... but its incredibly unique. The style is abit dodgy but different is good
Thanks for entering, and good luck
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I liked the line and the title "I'll see you...on the other side of the shattered glass." You can take that many ways. I'd go through this piece and proof read it for spelling and punctuation mistakes. Remember, "lose" (to misplace, not win something, etc.) is spelled with just one 'o'. "Loose" (not tightly fixed in place) has two. I hate to be the grammar Nazi on duty, but that's my job.
Nice piece and best of luck. -R.T
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Thank you for spotting that mistake!!
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