i know he's taller, and better looking
and i know he makes a better date
all i do is sit around and admire you
while he really shows you that you are beautiful
i know that he loves you better,
but does it count that i love you more?
i don't want to be your secret anymore
i want you to scream my name from the mountain tops
but, i'll understand if you don't
i'm more like a fanclub to you
admiring your every movement,
hoping you'll take time out of your busy day
just to notice me.
i scribble you all the silly lines
but he actually tells you
and although i've got so many pictures of you close to me
he is actually close to you
he can always make magic happen all around you
and always has a plan for the future
anything i do is just talking about
just how magical life could be
or how nice it would be to get away
i know he's taller, and better looking
and i know he makes a better date
i know he loves you better,
but does it count that i love you more?
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Holy sweet mother of my God!!!!!! I don't even know what to say....the hair on my arms are standing for this one! I don't love just one line or one word..I love every word there is to this! this took a hold of my chest and did not let it go until it was over! You have just written one of my favorites I think I might just have to print this one off and put it up on my wall!!! I love you so much SAM!!! XOXOX
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oh gawd do i ever relate to this woman. im so happy to see you writing again. im so proud of you and i hope you continue down this journey. no matter what happens you will be okay. and so will thepeople around you because you are in their lives.. and by the way.. it does count more than you could ever know. XoXoXoXoX~
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Longing.
I have no doubt that it counts more than anyone knows.
I wish you weren't my secret.
I wish you were my reality.
My flesh and blood.
Mine to have, and yours to keep.
God, to be able to move that mountain to somewhere I could scream.
Out of pain.
Out of need.
Out of longing.
Goddamnit, I can't ever stop loving you. -
Very nice job.
This is a great work. The emotion shows and surrounds the poem. The flow is very good and the grammar is well.
Thank you for writing.
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