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The Price You Pay

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To feel a tugging on your sleeve
you turn and no one there,
you feel the urge, you have to leave
to run, to who knows where.

The shadows whisper in the night
you need to seek some peace,
keep away from all things light,
but will the voices cease?

So step into the darker side
let evil fill your mind,
come with us and take a ride
and leave your world behind.

The price to pay is very small,
we’ll give you all you need,
your memories beyond recall,
let darkness be your creed.

Settle in, we’ll treat you fine
the past will be your past,
our Devil says, “And now you’re mine,
my love for you will last.

Your loving soul you’ll give to me
the bonds with life you’ll sever,
a welcome sight is what you’ll see
and you will leave ME never.

Your Master and a lover too
here with me you‘ll dwell,
all my bidding you will do
and Welcome To My HELL!”



 

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  • spideracer gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    Darkness plus

    Oh wow and wow again, this is a really great piece of writing. Imagery you've painted here is bloody brilliant, and this reader wants to jump onto that ride, for such invitation is offered here. Well done.


  • daviscth silver member
    August 25, 2008

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    This is such an awesome poem!! I can cleary see why Michaela picked it for the golden winner. Thanks for posting.


  • MoMoTheFairyTale
    July 20, 2008

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    oh wow

    truly deep, draws me in. very dark and enchanting my friend. sends goosebumps up my leg yet I am still in a peaceful trance. I love the fifth and the second stanza.
    good luck in your contest my friend

    I don't think I even stand a chance!
    *whistles*


  • Spiritual Soul
    July 17, 2008

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    Wow! This was awesome, just SO awesome, I loved this, it flowed so effortlessly. It was both dark and creepy, full of wonder also. This was beautifully dark I loved it, thanks for entering my contest!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    Wow---This is Perfection Sue! Flawless flow of the unforced rhyming verse and the imagery is abundant in its dark message---Very Very Well Done!!
    Best of luck in the contest!!


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    Oh Sue this piece is so wonderfully dark, I love it, love it, love it! Certainly not the Sue I know and love but just as damn good a write. WOW!!! Your light is shining bright in the dark!


  • Amera gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    This is great! The rythem and flow of this poem draws the reader right into the dark side. You write in the dark genre very well.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 14, 2008
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    The Ultimate Expose

    (apologies for the missing accent acute)

    Well done.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    He's there inside the dreams you hate
    He's there beneath the bed when you can't sleep
    He's in the extra piece of cheese you ate
    He's there to drag you to the endless deep

    He only wants to own you mind and soul
    He only wants to steal each pleasant thought
    He's only there to swallow mortals whole
    Are you really quite so keen to try this sport?


    Good stuff


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    Ouch! A very dark write Sue.. one that I can sooo relate too! He overcomes my mind at times and bid me to do his will!

    Fantastic write!

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