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I love you

Every night when I go to bed,
your the last thing that runs through my head.
Every moment that I'm not with you,
I'm wishing I was.
Every time my parents tell me to let you go,
I hold on to you more.
When I'm with you everything fades away,
and I'm happy for one brief moment.
All the words I want you to say,
you say with your eyes.
When have our problems,
but I couldnt see myself without you.
Theres nothing else I can say,
but I Love you.

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  • UnravledLove
    July 26, 2008
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    Great poem! I kinda of have this same problem except it tends to be better to let go but I never want to. Anyway love it! I really like these lines:Every time my parents tell me to let you go,
    I hold on to you more.
    When I'm with you everything fades away,
    and I'm happy for one brief moment.


  • Renegade Theory
    July 14, 2008

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    Remember that "your" and "you're" mean two different things. So, that "your" at the beginning of the second line should be "you're." I hate to be a grammar Nazi but that's my job. Nice piece. -R.T