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Fairyland

 

A moonlit walk to find a fairy glade

The map I dreamt last night has shown the way

The Earth so quickly yields to urgent spade

I have to do the deed before the day

 

The treasure that I find now seems to shine

The key around my neck a perfect fit

A thousand fairies sing the prize is mine

The inside of the casket brightly lit 

 

Sweet Andia has flown her prison cell

Rewards me with a night of total bliss

Now fairyland is where I choose to dwell

And Andia's my never ending kiss

 

Do not deny the dreams  you truly feel

A life of perfect magic can be real

 

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Picture credit: The Box of Dreams by manips-of-artist2

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  • jossiemarie gold member
    July 15
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    oh i love this, i mean really really love it, especailly the ending,
  • Sigh.. oh I wish for a life of perfect magic!

    A beautiful piece, that is just lovely for the picture.. a fairytale, that I think is dipped in reality.. perhaps one you have already found in your own life.

    This read beautifully aloud also.. a precious magical tale.. thank you!

  • A sonnet? I don't even know what a sonnet is, but I do recognize good poetry when I read it.

    "to find a fairy glade"
    I'd like me one of those!!

    "The key around my neck a perfect fit"
    Very cool imagery.

    "sing the prize is mine"
    Love this for some reason..it's evocative and makes me think of...I don't know, something really groovy.

    "Do not deny the dreams you truly feel"
    There's an additional space after 'dreams' for some reason...was that intentional or a typo?

    "A life of perfect magic can be real"
    Sounds like Disney!!! =D

    Best of luck

  • Flame-demise
    July 14

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    Wowow

    Very good writing. I have been looking around at a lot of your poems, and this is one of my favorites, because you used fewer words per line, and really painted a picture. You always have fantastic imagery and I appreciate that. I also appreciate your commitment to structured writing. You've earned a subscriber.

  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 14
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    Such dreams you have!

    Is this a real dream or did you just make it up in your head?

    Whichever, it's great.

  • Eusebius
    July 14

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    Bravo

    A perfect sonnet! A fine piece of sorcery here, you have woven a marvelous spell that fits so perfectly the illustration! I loved it, loved it, loved it! Bravo...


  • crimsondew silver member
    July 14
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    Beautiful fantasy done in a sonnet!
    All the best!

  • Isn't it just!! I'm glad you think it's gorgeous and look forward to reading your poem for it!

  • crimsondew silver member
    July 14
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    All the best!lovely picture indeed!
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