And here goes another dream
Meant to turn a poor man to a millionaire
Exploited by the lure of the filthy lucre
Reached american shores with a fluttering heart
Inside a burning passion
cursing his own mother
Agonized by the poverty
Now he dreams big .....
Dreams can be turned to reality from your home
Running away from the reality is not the work of the brave
Earn for yourself not just success but also the respect
And it will pay back
Mother's love is unconditional,unreserved,undying.....
A contest entry
- Allpoetry July New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended August 8, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was a very interesting piece.. Though it was a little hard to tell which option you used for the inspiration to this poem.. But you did a good job
thanks much for sharing this with us.. Best of luck in our contest..
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Interesting; full of emotions and strong thoughts.
Very well expressed
Please put the option used in the authors notes
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Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering the contest
This is an interesting piece. I believe the last line makes reference to "mother land" and thus you are saying that there is no need to go elsewhere to find the end of your dreams, only work where you are.
Well done.
Welcome to Allpoetry and I hope that you enjoy your stay
Thank you for entering our contest and I wish you the best of luck
Should you have any questions, please feel free to ask me
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welcome to allpoetry
I enjoyed the last stanza in this very much, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest..
Cheers
Grey
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10x frndho .. and hpe 2 carry on d work with all ur wishes ..
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Welcome to AllPoetry
I think this poem has real potential. The repetitions don't do anything for me and the second stanza is a bit too preachy, but I really loved the first half, how it's not too obvious but it is to the point. I also like the connections between your stanzas - for instance, the parallel between "cursing his own mother" and "Mother's love is unconditional,unreserved,undying". Here I'm left wondering if "mother" refers to your country. I also find myself intrigued by your title, how you have not finished the word "desire". That can be interpreted in so many ways. Good luck in the contest.
~Diana
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hey dienush .. 10x for the critical cooments .. really i appreciate your deep view on this piece of creativity ... yea mother and motherland here share a deep connection just like the new born baby shares with his/her mother thru the umbilical chord
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