My heart trembles as I care too much
never having a blessed hand from lady luck
in her my faith is lost
and life is anything but coiencedence
but finding comfort in the old familair bruise
holding onto the pain I know is true
always betraying the rose for the thorn
trusting those who leave me torn
when will I ever learn?
but it is in pain I grow
when all my scars glow
and from my sanity I hide
as old ashes divide
ashes scatter astray
as my mind whisks away
even in eternal betrayel,I still hope to find love
to become one
to love not in vain
to die in blissful arms without pain
Author notes
My username:Angel of agony
A contest entry
- Contest for member of Beautiful Minds Dark Addictions by islekine.
910 points, ended August 4, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
My very first freewrite.What do you think?
Comments
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your pain just leaps into the poem, i love it.
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This is a beautiful write....
I am not critiquing any of these as poetry...just savoring the beautiful minds that write them!!
Thanks so much for entering!!
Best wishes.
Write on!
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For your first freewrite, you pretty much did everything that a freewrite consists of. My favourite lines: always betraying the rose for the thorn
trusting those who leave me torn. Just be careful, if it's a new sentence use a capitol letter for the next line.
Well done.
~Swim
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