If only you were still here
to shine that glimmering smile
upon the world with grace
I curse the touch
of fate's cruel hand
that divided our love
between worlds
If I had held you
a moment longer
the accident that claimed your soul
may have been thwarted
If there was a way
that our love could bloom
across that great beyond
I would pour out my emotions
with a million kisses
rather than tears
I'll keep your love in my pocket
until we meet again .......
Author notes
quote prompt: "If only". "Those must be the two saddest words in the world.”
By: Mercedes Lackey
In a list
A contest entry
- If Only.... by jasminerose.
1050 points, ended July 23, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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Touching words from the soul that touched my own heart.
Reminds me of that song that Pearl Jam Covered;Last Kiss. Good song! Lovely poem! Yay for the HM.
Love,
~Krys~
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ahhh congratulations on your H.M. my Dear Pantha..
a great take on the prompt.
touching and wonderful..
Love and Light
Frozentearz
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Oh my, this is truly touching! Beautifully penned to capture the essence of the prompt..
Thank you for entering this wonderful piece of poetry in our contest!
Jasminerose
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If only indeed...
This is beautifully sad and perfect for the prompt....
I love it
Lynda
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Very touching!
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Beautifully tragic, I was crying by the end!
Touching, honest and full of yearning, one of your finest
Best of luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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If only there were a thousand wishes to bring you back...the things we could do, say to one another. Someday if one believes, you will be reunited! If only...God what a fantastic poem! ~Sie
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thanks for the wonderful and insightful comment, glad you enjoyed the piece - I feel quite heartened now as to the poetic merit of it.
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