as the warm rays
of the sun shone upon
your brown locks
and set deep
into your dark brown eyes
a smile formed
for deep within I knew,
just as the sun
checkered you heart,
your smile melted mine
just like your touch
on a cool day
Author notes
option 1~
A contest entry
- PiF PROMPT CONTEST by penman.
700 points, ended July 16, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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haha. that's what my boyfriend looks like.
that's what I was thinking of when reading.
but besides, this was really sweet.
congrats on the honourable mention.
<3
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wow, its good to see not everyone writes depressing stuff lol
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This is truly beautiful. I absolutely loved the feel of this. Very nice, and wonderfully composed. Great write!
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wow! AWSOME!! keep up the good work,girl! cool talent and nice piece of work!!
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Beautifully Penned!
I like how this speaks the heart with the imagery of your love.
Bravo, and congrates on the HM!
-Timothy
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oh now then, thats so beautifully said....well done
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innocent, pure, guileless
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This is lovely!
A very warm a touching write
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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