Into the moon dreams are cast..
Haunting eyes watch as love passes by,
Lone wolf wandering the night
singing melodies of souls cry..
Pair of stars fall one by one
as water cleans like the sun,
wind turns the world 'round and 'round
As your soul sinks in ocean's sand..
like flowers without rain
air stills as does a heart beats lungs..
Author notes
Prompt: Without you I shall never breathe again
10 lines of beauty and what it means to you.
Rhyme or free verse I don't mind
No cussing
No erotica
Sensual is fine
A contest entry
- PIF - Prompt- 10 poets & 10 Lines by Cannonsfire.
800 points, ended July 14, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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beautiful and sensual dear, I loved the poem and the author writing it...You are wonderful as your poem dear
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you have written a very expressive piece. Well done. Juls
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As your soul sinks in ocean's sand..like flowers without rain,air stills as does a heart beats lungs..wonderful take on the promt there is such a great depth within your words
good luck in the contest
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Sigh.. this is really beautiful sis!
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Thanks.. I think it sucks...
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It really doesn't!!
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Ok..
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*clapy*
lov this sis, very expressive in beautiful ways
Cind
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Betterer!!!
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yay!!! Good
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"love passes by' not pasts...'cleans' not cleanes...'ocean's sand', last line 'as' should be 'a heart beats'...Re-edit those and you have a very good piece that I can visualise quite well. C
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Fixed
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I really like that second stanza. You did well with this prompt.
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uh huh.. with all the grammar mistakes and all huh? glad you liked it!
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sure
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Your so mean to me!!!!
lol.
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mean? No way. *huggles you*
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