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Vision and Quakes

 

Pounding hearts,

hips in thunderous cadence

over anticipation's vision.

 

Tongue caresses forbidden

body invites visitor,

one thrust brings heaven,

chocolate quakes again.

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 15, 2008

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    One very sensual write! Dramatic lines of suspense, emotion, erotic thoughts, and actions..Who says two sentences cannot say something! You have something here!
    Good write!


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    July 14, 2008

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    this was delicious it was like chocolate melting in my mouth reading this i think you did a very great excelent job good luck


  • maralisa silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    wonderful poem very passionate and sensual
    Tongue caresses forbidden body invites visitor,one thrust brings heaven,chocolate quakes again.good luck in the contest


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    22 words and I have to take a "Cold Shower"!
    Well Done & Best of luck in the contest! )