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It's What You See

It's not what you look at that matters,it's what you see
and I'm the acorn that fell from your tree.
So when you look at me, you may just see you;

a mirror image of the you that's true.

But I can't be you and you can't change me.
It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see.
So look deeply within me to find my soul.
I am your daughter; not someone for you to control.

I am too much like you and that's what you resent.
But it's with the you in me that I am content.
This woman is everything that God has made me to be.
It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see.

 

 

 






 

Author notes

This piece was written for a contest in which I chose the quote: It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see.

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Comments


  • trekkergirl
    July 22, 2008
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    Nice read. Very well written. Good job.


  • ConvenientExcuses
    July 15, 2008

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    I really like the message of this poem. Well done! I wish you the best of luck in the contest you've entered. Keep up the great writing!


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 14, 2008
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    Please read the rules.


  • Suzianne
    July 13, 2008

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    Interesting theme

    I like your topic, "It's not what you look at that matters,it's what you see," and I think the repetition of that line is important. What I do not understand is why you distracted from the message of your very nice poem by including cliches. I wanted you to develop your own message in your own distinctive style. This has a lot of potential. I hope you will work on it and make it truly yours.