Tragedy strikes and they still look past her
Never noticing the scars on her heart.
Cuts go unnoticed and bruises scatter on her skin.
She screams but no sound comes out.
Shadows linger in the hallway.
Their coming for her they always do.
Sorry is a word she's never heard.
Pleasure is something she'll never feel.
She's an empty shell cracked open way too soon.
She hides her body in disgrace scared of what they might discover.
Questions echo in her mind as bodies lays on top of her.
Whispers surround her room as she cowers into the corner.
Her mind is tainted and her body covered with sins.
Innocence is departed and damage remains.
Author notes
Option 1--"This is to all the times I wish I had said no. This is to all the times I knew what he was doing. And I ignored it."
Im pretty sure this quote isn't about abuse but i think it fits my poem.
Please tell me if you would like me to change my poem because i am willing to write a fresh poem.
I just wrote this and it is uncomplete I may edit in 2 or 3 more stanza's.
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Wow, what a powerful piece. It holds definite pain and emotion, and you took the quote and painted such a sad & vivid picture. If you do add more, message me & I'll read it again. Otherwise, short & simple like this isn't bad at all. Thanks for entering our contest! =) I wish you the best of luck ! ♥
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As i said on Yahoo...it's good, but needs more work. Try and improve the structure, close your sentences off in the 3rd stanza more tighly. A few rhymes mightn't hurt. Good though
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