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Vampyre Heart

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Midnight weaves so beautifully
the darkness in my heart..

[your melody sings]

Falling stars and milky ways
Shred my world apart..

[hearing your screams]

Voices heard in minds archway,
loneliness seeps in..

[fading in life's terminal]

Shadows form within a soul
and comforts worldly sins..

[lips once innocent now stream with living blood]

Dreaming of love through-out
the years...Your memory
lingers..

[held in sweet scents of your skin upon mine]

The warmth you gave
and kisses you bestowed
upon bitter lips..

[leaving hearts in memories where you will ever be]

Waiting in time to feel your touch
on withered brittle skin..

[bring about the love we shared in people that are prey]

Seeing your face in bloods unchanging grace,
if only I was not me..
Different time and different pleasure
different then we used to be..


Long years passed with love held fast
as I drifted to eternity with life..
Your memory lives within me though
in shadows I do dwell..


hunger creeps along my spine
for someone to be mine..
Accept me the way I am and
never leave my side..

Shadows dwell here in the night and comforts me
with time, yet still love
lingers in this vampiric heart of mine..

Author notes

to speak to me, with your vampiric heart

Picture Credit: blood_by_werol

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  • cheerios4444
    August 22
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    Simply Beautiful

  • kat-mwahzz
    August 15
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    iu like it it so sweet and more and can u plz read my poems plz

  • Kazytc gold member
    August 13

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    Geee whiz this is sure deep!

    Now this cuts deep into the soul! ... In the nicest most creative and poetic sort of way with fabulous poetic graphics and artistry, love the scultoing and the bracketted words idea, which is very original and different too.
    A mazing storyline and vivid imagery and great flow and rhyme too, your talent shines brightly throuhg again and this is another phenomenal piece of fantastic poetry.
    Love this one too, wow bowled over! Well done, Bravo! Write on Sis! No wonder this won you a Gold!
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx


  • WTF-Hatchwork silver member
    August 4
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    Whoa

    sent shivers up me horns!

  • DarkRomantic113 silver member
    August 1

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    I can see you deserve all that gold. This was truly remarkable. You have captivated what it means to be dark romantic. I loved this piece simply because it embellishes a certain passion in the darkness. Well-penned.


  • imahealer gold member
    July 30

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    First of your poems I have read, and am floored by your enormous talent! "withered brittle skin" such a visual metaphor! 20 years old, and writing like this! Poems about vampires have always fascinated me. You took the prompt and wrote a verse that no one could touch. "Talent" must be your middle name! Have added you to my fav's! HAve to log off and rest now, but I will definitely be back to read more! Is that a photo of you?

    Linda


    • Angelflower Greeters member
      July 30
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      Thank you very much fo your wonderful comment. I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much.. And no it's not a picture of me, though I was told a while ago that I looked a little like her..Lol. weird .
      Again! thank you very much for your wonderful comment, made me smile

  • death-raab
    July 30
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    wow

    a very wondeful write emotion flows into the words you chose very good write


  • Darc Raven gold member
    July 25

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    Ooo, beautiful! Truely inspiring in it's darkened flow. love the seperatating one liners in the brackets.. gave a different insite to the mind and heart. wonderful job.
    ~Darc Raven


  • Lonely
    July 23

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    This was a wonderfully woven piece of poetry.. The words you used are wonderful, and dark, and full of emotions.. I liked this piece a lot.. And you won the Gold trophy on this one, Congratulations you deserved it. Keep on writing

    Peace,
    Lonely


  • Vampyre Knight gold member
    July 22
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    wow...i absolutely adore this...makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside

  • davidjmartin gold member
    July 18

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    Wow! This is amazing. Well deserving of the gold trophy, this had everything. Infact, I could have read on and on... it flowed so well, reading along, I was just swept along with it all. Such a beautiful, sad tone and some excellent vocabulary. I kind of sense that there was a hint of something personal in this for you. It felt 'real'. Nicely done, and congratulations!

    David. x

  • darkmindedfreak
    July 15

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    that was a beautiful poem. definately sent chills down my spine!

    "Midnight weaves so beautifully
    the darkness in my heart..

    [your melody sings]

    Falling stars and milky ways
    Shred my world apart..

    [hearing your screams]

    Voices heard in minds archway
    loneliness seeps in..

    [fading in life's terminal]

    Shadows form within a soul
    and comfort worldly sins..

    Brilliant!

  • Edna Sweetlove
    July 15
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    Not very scary.

  • ennovy silver member
    July 15

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    Oh yes! I loved your concept and you told a most wonderful story in verse from the heart of a Vampire...Congrats on the gold....novy


  • AngelWithDarkWings gold member
    July 15

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    WOW.. sissy this is amazing, I see why it won Gold. WOW. such sadness & its tender also. its beautiful sissy. this is such a profound poem.. you have once again caused me to become speechless.. its a good thing, its all good sissy..

    I Love you Sissy.

    Congratulations on the Gold.

    kat


  • Sanguinarius gold member
    July 15

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    The dark beauty contained in this piece made my heart ache. Such tenderness intertwined with sadness. Your words spoke directly to my own vampiric heart, and it deeply sighs . Thank you ever so much for sharring this with me, I am deeply honored . ~Bret~


  • Darkwell silver member
    July 15

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    this is just, wow i dont even know words great enough to describe this breathtaking write


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 14

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    What a tale you have penned sis!! Absolutely amazing!! I think this is perfect for looking inside the heart of a vampire!!


  • CinfullyDelicious
    July 14

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    awwww wow

    this is just AWESOMENESS darl

    love it darl..hope you do well



    Cind


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    July 13

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    So very well done, can picture the lustful and emotional heart of the vampire throughout this. Great job hun. Love, C


  • HolyMan28
    July 13

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    Shit..

    This is amazing. Seriously amazing..

    I loved it from the opening picture.. very great choice with that. The sections in the [ ]'s were also an amazing choice.

    I like how you switched up the scheme too, and finished it off with a few stanza's.

    Amazing work, and good luck in the contest thing.


  • solo wisp gold member
    July 13

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    I shall forever camp within your hair, with gold barred security! This I promise to you! heh

    Such a tale ... and great description through the eyes of what I would believe to be a vampire.

    hey hey hey ... no biting me ... I'll only mutate. heh


    • Angelflower Greeters member
      July 14
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      Why my hair?! theres nothing special about it!!! your icky!!!! lol..

      Aww thank you.. I've never written something like this before.. Lol.. thought I would see if I could do it..


      You don't like a little biting?! don't you mix pleasure and pain
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