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Where Am I ,Who Am I, What Am I

She never felt the icy fingers grip her brain that day,
she never thought when she indulged she would lose her way.
She never considered the life within she never heard it scream,
where am I, who am I, what am I within a wicked dream.

 

The following day she stood alone unsure of her plight,
trying to find the words to tell of where she had been that night.
As they asked the icy fingers gripped her mind a wicked dream indeed,
I can't explain myself, I'm afraid, because I'm not myself you see.

Each night the fingers tighten as she wretches and screams in pain,
Voices yells for her to replenish the drugs once again.
Like a puppet she rushes to find her the fix to make it stop ,
as the demon within begins to laugh whispers freedom there's not.

Once such a beauty turned to stray like a homely cat that's lost its way,
mean to the core for she is not anymore the little girl at play .
Falling to the crowds who dwells in the dark yet tears fills her eyes,
she sits and often wonders why she is so sad with thoughts to die.

She never felt the icy fingers grip her brain that day,
she never thought when she indulged she would lose her way.
She never considered the life within she never heard it scream,
where am I, who am I, what am I within  a wicked dream .

 

If you want to find your way and never again ask why ,

you must walk away from the drugs and walk away tonight .

Find in time that little one that was once filled with love,

is  within you shivering cold and so alone the one you locked up .

 

 

Author notes

I can't explain myself,I'm afraid. because I am not myself, you see

she never felt the icy fingers grip her mind that day
she never thought when she indulged she would lose her way
she never considered the life within she never heard it scream
where am I, who am I , what am I within a wicked dream

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  • whiterabbit.
    July 19, 2008

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    This is so well written and it makes me sad that I can relate to this, much more than I would like to. The emotions in here are so real and once again, I've felt them more than I would have liked to. Wonderful write, you're very talented.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 15, 2008
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    WOW!!!

    A stunning piece, the darkness within your words is excellent. The imagery blew me away here, especailly the lines..
    'Each night the fingers tighten as she wretches and screams in pain,
    Voices yells for her to replenish the drugs once again.'
    I can relate to them with ease. An intense and very powerful piece. Good luck


  • maralisa silver member
    July 14, 2008
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    If you want to find your way and never again ask why ,
    you must walk away from the drugs and walk away tonight .
    Find in time that little one that was once filled with love,is within you shivering cold and so alone the one you locked up .wonderful poem with a great flow good luck in the contest


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    July 14, 2008

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    Love the flow to this, feeling so natural, the rhyming is done so well

    I enjoyed the tale you told within the poem and the darkness level..GREAT



    Cindy


  • B.m.w
    July 13, 2008

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    Wow this poem is amazing. Deep dark adventurous in a way. Just amazing. Good luck in the contest it fits wonderfully. Also as I was reading it, it sounded like a song in a way.


  • Re-invention silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    Once such a beauty turned to stray like a homely cat that's lost its way,
    mean to the core for she is not anymore the little girl at play .
    Falling to the crowds who dwells in the dark yet tears fills her eyes,
    she sits and often wonders why she is so sad with thoughts to die.

    wow... these lines took me away.. so much to relate to here...
    this is greatly penned and greatly taken to a far level indeed.. loved it and enjoyed it!


  • Rheea gold member
    July 13, 2008
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    oh pattie not the dark side!=) hehehe


  • luna-midnight gold member
    July 13, 2008
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    aww, good luck

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