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autumn ku





leaves in fitful breeze
unclad branches reveal sun
one russet holdout







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  • Patpowers silver member
    September 28, 2008
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    Nice work on the haiku James! Brilliant work as always. THANKS!!!

  • WritingWretch silver member
    August 22, 2008

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    A fine traditional hiaku

    I am starting to like this form more and more. This is exquisit. Reminds me of the O. Henery tale "The Last Leaf". Favorite phrases: "unclad branches" & "one russet holdout".
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  • piccola silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    This is such a cute haiku. I see the bare branches allowing a view of the sun and one leaf holding on for dear life (smiles) thank you for your entry.