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stark

 

 

 

 

 
here is an outback-mind,
naked and dry,
all mystery [ like water ]
buried deep.
 

 
casual conversations trip
on the glare of curious sun-
light
and the whispers shout
 
interpret us slightly,
for each desert is merely a forest
grown reckless.
 
 
 

 

 
she smiles,

then stares against the moon
instead.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Nothing makes us so lonely as our secrets.
Word Count: 47/48

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  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    July 17

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    sunlight... I don't know why .....but sunlight seems further away than the moon..
    perhaps because the moon never fills up with voices like light does in my head
    and in spite of the distance, the absolute bleakness of it, it remains a far closer friend..

    when I read you... it stings behind my eyes in a way ..I could never explain here..

    just know that it does.



  • Never Fall in Love
    July 17

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    I remember reading this ... I don't remember why I didn't comment. But nowthat I'm here, all I can really do is repeat colin. Well worth the gold

    ♥x.


  • Fug-azi
    July 17

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    I really don't know what to say for this one, it reads so very softly yet has such hard undertones and I can offer nothing to change in it.

    Excellent


  • pulsating
    July 15

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    the moon is almost full tonight....this is a pretty poem