In the darkest hours
when sleep should soothe,
my mind meanders through
fissures of fear
And I wonder what waits
within its significance
So search I shall to find
meaning from madness
For surely my soul is speaking
a language I need to learn
Author notes
Prompt ~ "I think that the nightmares are telling me things about myself that I need to know. And I try to understand what they mean, so I can get to know something more about my soul."~ Tori Amos~
5-10 lines
This quote really spoke to me.. because I've been having nightmares that torment me in their meaning...
In a list
A contest entry
- Quote Quickie by Starz of Heaven.
525 points, ended July 13, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow fantastic!
Wow fantastic! Love this fabulous piece of poetic artistry! Love the bit that goes:
"In the darkest hours
when sleep should soothe,
my mind meanders through
fissures of fear"
"Fissures of fear" love that, its fantatic poetic graphic artistry, says so much in so few words, well used and expressed descriptives.
Very clever is also the bit that goes:
"So search I shall to find
meaning from madness
For surely my soul is speaking
a language I need to learn"
Laugnauge you need to learn... clever... bravo!
Wow I am blown away with this, no wonder you have won so many trophies. This is phenomenal work, and I would say you are a poetic genius. I do not jest either!
Love this well done bravo!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
Ps: Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
Glad you liked it. It is a great honour to enter your
wonderful contest thanks for the honour and the privalege.
Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
Kaz.XX
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Thank you dear, you are too kind!
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WOW! You did a wonderful job with the prompt, but I guess you know that seeing how it is wearing Gold...
You are amazing and that muse never sleeps does she...
Love to you.
sis
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Beautiful piece, I can definitely see why it won gold, and it took a quote with a thought provoking idea and brought it to a new level, to a new reality. I really enjoyed this piece!!
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Wow! A fantastic write for the quote! I am sure alot of people can realte to this! Congratulations on the Gold!
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This is full of impact.....made sense, a lot of thinking can be done in quiet nights...after reading the prompt I saw it was about nightmares, still quite apt.
Congrats on a well deserved gold!
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Congrats on the gold!
Superb write, trying to understand our dreams can drive you nuts, but they rarely mean what you see, usually the opposite or something you wouldn't even have thought of. Congrats on the gold hun
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wow auntie this is an amazing take on the prompt. the way you captured the quote and aplied a lot more meaning and depth is amazing. well done on your gold
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Thanks sweetie!
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Lovely, sweets. You are incredible.
Dez
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Brill hun, loved it and congrats on the gold. Love, C
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What a lovely way you have with words my dearest sister! So easy to read and understand with big words too! A wonderful write. Congrats on the gold!
~Kystal Angel
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ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh yes. I think we talked about this and have a mutual path ... yesh.
My soul likes to change its language ... 
I go to learn THE language and out comes Greek ... sigh. rat-a-tat-tat ... *smacks soul upside the head* 
Congrats on da Gold My Kiwi Queen!
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I can certainly see why this is Gold, it's magnificent! You have such an awesome way with words my friend. And again, I surely know where you're coming from with this write. Congrats on a WELL deserved trophy!
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Nightmares...well, I had this dream that this advanced bugs (that didn't look like bugs, more like miniature robots) were like...around and I was spraying them and...okay, maybe that's not the kind of nightmare you meant.
"when sleep should soothe"
Love this...it doesn't always!! I'm a crazy insomniac (mostly because of my stupid naps and nocturnal sleep cycle)...but yes, this line speaks to me.
"And I wonder what waits within its significance"
Oooh, this is awesome!!! There's something so...SIGNIFICANT about this line. =D
"a language I need to learn"
LoL...I don't understand myself either. =P It's my right as a teenager, you know..heh..
Kick-ass write and kudos on the gorgeous Gold trophy
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aww sis.. You did a wonderful job! I really love this!! This was just full of emotion.. I'm sorry your having nightmares sis.. I've been having them too.. congrats on the Gold.. Well deserved sis..
Angel
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Thanks sis.. sorry you're having nightmares too
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Wow! This got gold before I could get here. You not only did it fit the prompt, it way out did it. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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wow this is cool sis, so well thought out and written
COngrat's on the gold
Cind
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Wonderful write.... ahhhh what comes from the darkest recesses of the troubled mind aye ... good luck in the contest
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Indeed! I'm surprised I haven't gone completely
yet!
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wow, you did wonderful with the quote, you wrote such abeautiful poem, wonderful joba nd keep writitng
stepphanie ♥
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In the darkest hours
when sleep should soothe,
my mind meanders through
fissures of fear
~ that would explain all the dark quickies...j/k!!!
very well thought out, deeply moving...i think this prompt brought out some issues in all of us. nicely done.
tim
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I really like the last 2 lines and the title...no, I like all of it, what am I saying? I like those things the most. I hope your nightmares end soon, good luck in the contest!
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Oh my gosh yes
Sigh this is me for the longest time I have been struggling with sleep and nightmares even with medicine that is to help me but really does not sigh thank you for your entry much love
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