9 pm and he calls
and he says
can ya help me out here
i’m tryin’
but i just don’t
knowwhatelsetosayexcept
hey
sorry
and i lie here
beaten for two years
by that
word
and think
you were never a good lover
it wasn’t the penis
just the way your hands
moved
like a blind man
with books without bumps
you’d hump
like dogs in open streets
nervous
about water
and the pissed off man
at the window
screaming:
‘fuck on your own time’
and you did
with that woman
who wrote suck poetry
her underwear swimming like
elementary schools
womb-weary
of accidental spurts
and cold eggs
(what was she? 40?)
she licked candles in your church
and thought she’d shit out gods
or something just as stupid
as the time i swore you were
outside my door
ready
with your baggage
and our lives
beginning
but now
you say you love her
it was your mistake
don’t know how it happened
(you prick
you dirt-mouthed
liar)
she burns like a
dimestore lighter
for your river of
pink-cut heroin
her laugh is a trashbag
hugging your tragedies
and i’m sure her pig eyes
will drink the bars dry
-yes even those nasty green cherries-
because unlike you
she’s a real
man
but i bet she fakes
just as good as i can
or maybe
a little bit
better
than you and those
gin-infested
sorries
so i murmur
it’s okay
i know how it goes
but it’s getting late
tick tock
tick tock
y’know
got work in the morning
and all i have to do is
hang up
and smile
on the dark bed
on that wet spot
on his beautiful cock
then sigh down
still juicy
&
sleep like
a
god
damn
rock
Author notes
YAY! Goooooooo ANGST! lol This was so much fun to do, lol. It's been a while since I've had the inclination to be so bitchy and so I thank you muchly for the opportunity.
Hope you liked this little skeleton dance.
A contest entry
- graveyard by the atlantic.
1000 points, ended July 28, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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no one rattles skeletons better than you
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You are too good to me...thank you...
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Skeleton jitterbug. Now tell me how you really feel.
This is excellent. As I read it I felt I had to fend off blows that were landing on my face and head. The anger and hurt were very intense.
I love this. I love the form you put it in, the way you broke up the lines. It sounds like someone gasping for air.
Well deserved gold.
Garrison
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hahahahaha desiree syphillis
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These skeletons rattle and shake like a good vent on a past that still has some skin left to remember. Love, C
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"her laugh is a trashbag
hugging your tragedies"
I liked that part.
The whole this was sooo angsty I could barely take it lol! Very very good. way to clean out the clutter ;P. -
it wasn’t the penis
just the way your hands
moved
like a blind man
with books without bumps
you’d hump
like dogs in open streets
nervous
about water
and the pissed off man
at the window
screaming:
‘fuck on your own time’
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each word wrenched a drop of envy from my body
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This is both touching and angsty and amusingly satisfying!
"sorry
and i lie here
beaten for two years
by that
word"
It was that bit that touched me, easy to relate to. SWINE!
"she’s a real
man
but i bet she fakes
just as good as i can
or maybe
a little bit
better"
Than there's that bit, like a slap in the face, two fingers up!
I love your poetry, it flows so smoothly, like a nice merlot 
When I get the end I think NOOOOO, I NEED TO BUY ANOTHER BOTTLE! lol
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absoloutely loved this little skelton dance, i think our brains were born from the same thread.
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This was really fun to read I liked it! If I had any applauds left I would give you three.
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Alright, I am back to comment appropriately.
You suck.
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Yeah...well...
You blow.
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suck or blow, who's counting?
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not at the moment, but hubby sure is clamoring for me to
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Tell him first to do the dishes, sweept, take out the trash, feed the cats, water the plant and vaccum and then...maybe. At least that's what I tell my fiance when he's wantin' some nookie.
You gotta pay to play, that's what my momma taught me.
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lmao.
he's wanting it bad, hell he's even walking the dog right now! -
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Oh shit.
He must be SERIOUSLY horny now...lmao
Be good to him, m'pet...he might just do the laundry next time.
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man, I wish with gold you'd get extra guys... lol
yellow ones that is, clapping.
Loved, loved this.
Best thing I read all day. Thankey.
Kathleen
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Oh yeah...
Dirty pretty girlfriend, dirty pretty...lol
Beautifully bitchy it is!
☼Becky☼
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You do angst better than most. lol. You should be angry and disgruntled a whole lot more! This was hella fun to read, but mostly because I know who and what it's about. Mwahahahaha.
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Lol. Another case of quick fingers?
Thank you. Glad you liked.
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