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(scraps)

Keeping silent, i watch you watch me
cold stare penetrating my worth
console me in your shadows
its all a lie
I wont even try

**unfinished**

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  • Harlequin Dance
    December 26, 2008
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    Lovely for an unfinished piece. Keep working on it! I want to read how it turns out!


    • Summer Dawn
      December 26, 2008
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      thanks for reminding me. i'll get back on it sometime in the near future. thanks for reading and commenting.


  • smiley
    July 17, 2008
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    wow

    well for this piece to be unfinished, it is quite powerful just as is...

    yvonne


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    July 14, 2008
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    Brilliant so far. I love "its all a lie/I wont even try". And scraps? Are you someone who writes random thoughts down all the time in the hopes of starting off a poem from them? God knows I do that, all the time. My phone's draft box is full of them lol.